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To See A World  by Nightwing 17 Review(s)
IthilienReviewed Chapter: 40 on 2/4/2006
I finally landed. Sorry for the delay in this review. As usual. Iíll tell you, Nightwing, I may have a hard time getting to my favorites to review, but I am loyal and I always, somehow, manage to get my review in. Eventually.

But then I shouldnít feel too guilty I guess. It took a while for us to get this chapter. Okay, I just tossed guilt on you, and I know itís not required. You have a life to live. So let me fix this by saying this chapter was DEFINITELY worth the wait.

I wasnít expecting to come back to the elf again, but of course Iím delighted that you wrote it this way. Gosh, Iím worried for him. He apparently still suffers from his injury. I know I thanked you before for this, but I have to reinforce that. Refreshing is what it is when an author takes their time about resolving issues. Too often I see someone get ill and then a few chapters later they are all better again. Sometimes I wonder why was it necessary to create the illness in the first place. But this story doesnít do that. Legolas was injured from the start, and you havenít made that go away. Weíve seen ups and downs in the illness, but it has always been there, and THAT is one of the things that makes this story believable and truly worth reading.

Ramhar is just nasty. Iím not sure what he intends for Legolas, but it will not be good. Actually, I do think I know what he intends. Is he planning to hostage him to Thranduil, use the elf-prince as a means to get a better hold on the forest access? Then again, Iím remembering that Legolas is not the most beloved in his family. He might not make a good excuse for Thranduil to drop his defenses.

Besides, we have this blindness issue to deal with (which also keeps its place evenly within the story Ė well done my friend). Brina seems to have realized Legolasí deception, but outside of her, Alon and Aragorn, no one else has quite figured it out. How did Legolas slip up so that she figured it out? Phooey, it may be a while before I know as you tell us weíre next going to embark on Aragornís adventure. Darn! Well, I hope life continues to bless you with spare time so you can write more of this story soon.


Author Reply: And now I'm finally replying. I agree it is rather tiresome to see our heroes severely injured, near death, and suddenly - usually after the uninjured party clasps the hands of the injured and somehow "pours his life force" into his friend by the strength of his love alone (oh, and of course singing something in Elvish) - all is well again. Huh? I hope I'm doing better than that, and that I've created more than injury for injury's sake.

Ramhar is nasty, vain and all that rot, but there just might be a human side to him as well. Perhaps we will see that aspect show itself before it's all over.

Actually we're back with the elf again next chapter, but it looks promising that we'll see something of Aragorn as well. And now back to it, while the house is mine!

IrethReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/29/2006
I was very gladly surprised you updated your fic, and this chapter had me on the edge of my seat. And the fact that nobody noticed Legolas" blindness didn't strike me as strange, he's been able to see before this all happened so he knows what to do to make it believable. So the elf got a bit of respite. That's probably a good thing, gives Aragorn a bit more time to gain strength as well!!
I really wonder why Ramhar (great name by the way, scary as hell!!) hates the elves so muchand way to GO Brina!!! For helping the elf and for noticing his blindness...she might be able to help him with the headaches and the pain in his neck.... I really hope you will update soon and I'm really glad to hear your daughter's doing good. Thanks for sharing, lots of hugs and kisses!!!!

Author Reply: Hello, my apologies for taking so long to respond. I kinda like Ramhar's name myself. It sounds tough and mean. Malcovan I am less fond of now. Sounds like a name of an Italian artist or something.

I think Brina will be of great help to Legolas. I'm glad she's here.

sofiaReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/29/2006
I see an update for this story only to realize i've missed the last few chapters! So I've been catching up and I have to say I love it. I've been looking forward to Alun and the boy possibly meeting with Legolas. And if Thranduil finds out what has happened to Legolas... I can imagine what his reaction would be like.
I for one thought Legolas' blindness was convincing, I think the only time I doubted (a tiny bit, I must say) if it seemed real was when he was in the lord's room and all the people were there.
Good job and I can't wait for more!

Author Reply: Hello Sofia! Well it's probably fun to have a few chapters to play with all at once.

It's OK that you doubted the blindness at that time. I tried to convey that it was rather chaotic in there, but writing from Legolas' POV it might not have been descriptive enough to establish the circumstances in the room: flaring torches (not yet daylight), yelling people, Legolas was bent down, and he either kept his eyes closed or fixed upon the ceiling, etc.

More is coming, at my usual snail's pace, but it's coming!

yanicReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/26/2006
omigosh, an update! While I can't say I'm really happy that Legolas finally reached the end of his ability to endure physical torment, I am glad he's with someone who can take care of his wounds. I really want to hear the story of Gildwas and the elves he met, I love all the twists in this story!

Author Reply: No, it's a sad thing that Legolas has been brought to the edge. But we need the old lady, and he needs time.

The story of Gildwas? Yes... yes... scurries off to get to work.

BevReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/26/2006
How wonderful to see an up-date from you. Glad your daughter is doing better.
Well now....I must agree with everyone else...you have written a very descriptive idea of how Legolas has learned his patience. I always love to hear
all about his wonderful traits. So glad he has another ally,in Brina,to help
him. Yes...we were all waiting for Aragorn to make an appearence, but you are
right about the time-line...it just wouldn't make sence for him to just
bounce up and be ready to fight. Again...I must say...this is just a magnificent story. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Be well...Peace.
Bev


Author Reply: (inswet girly giggle here) I love to hear about the elf's wonderful traits too. I'm glad Brina has finally turned up. I've been waiting for her for ages!

Author Reply: Ummm, right. That would be "insert".

EldarielReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/25/2006
Thanks for the new update! It is great as usual. It is good to hear your daughter is well.

Author Reply: Thanks for reviewing!

TithenFeredirReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/25/2006
I am so happy to hear that your daughter is doing well! My thoughts and prayers continue for you both.

In this chapter you have drawn an excellent picture of Legolas' courage. You show him enduring that time of waiting, anticipating the torment to come, his ultimate breakdown and the certaintly of a gruesome death. He is grieving, weakened and completely without hope, yet he plans his resistance and fights to keep his dignity, and there is no bravado in it. I think this is a fairly realistic depiction of how unglamorous and difficult real courage is. To apply it to Legolas in this way makes one sympathise with him all the more. The angst in this part feels very authentic and you do it without resorting to any graphic brutality. Wow.

There needed to be some relief, though. I agree that it is too soon for Aragorn to return as much as we may want it, so Brina makes a good substitute. I'm hoping that she will have the remedy to Legolas' blindness. ...And there has to be some dissention from the people of the city for there to be a chance of success for our heroes, right?

This story is so well done! Can't wait for the next! ~TF




Author Reply: Wow, you're right. I hadn't thought of it in that way, and I appreciate you pointing it out.

Courage is not glamerous, nor does it look "cool", and it usually goes unwitnessed. Moments of great trial and suffering are often endured alone.

LindeleaReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/25/2006
I am glad to see this updated.

I do like Koryon's grandmother. She is obviously no fool, and will help in any way she can.

Thanks for the author's note on the timeline at the bottom. I am glad that you are considering Aragorn's situation in realistic rather than super-human terms. Perhaps he would be stronger than an average man, and perhaps he might recover faster, and have more endurance, but he is still capable of weariness and injury. (Even Gandalf was "already weary" when he faced the Balrog.) It is attention to such details (making it more "real") that draws this reader in.

Author Reply: Gandalf even ended up with his arm in a sling at the end of "The Hobbit". I figure if a Maia can be injured and fatigued, certainly the lesser beings can as well.

I like the old lady too. I suppose she's something of a stereotype - the crabby old healer - but I am basing her personality on a couple of old ladies I know, and they rock!

White WolfReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/25/2006
I loved the description of waiting. It was easy to picture all the times Legolas was forced to do it, when he'd much rather be in action.

I'm glad that our dear elf has finally gotten some attention for all his physical hurts. I was wondering when someone would notice that he is blind. I'm not surprised it is the wily old healer. I'm interested in the tale she has to tell about elves.

After your explanation, I understand why Aragorn hasn't shown up yet. I was wondering where that ranger was. He isn't going to be happy when he finds out what's been done to Legolas or why.

I'm glad your daughter is doing well. I've been praying for her.


Author Reply: I can imagine he has had to wait a bunch of times.... snore...

Legolas does need a good healer right about now, and she fits the bill.

MystwingReviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/24/2006
I think that it is very believeable that people would not realize that Legolas is blind. People are very resourceful and can find ways to disguise disabilities or limitations they may face, and if others aren't looking for it, they may not realize. Ramhar and Malcovan seem to be more interested in seeing Legolas afraid and beaten down. When he turns his face or closes his eyes it may seem to reinforce the idea that he is cowering. That, added to shady lighting and Legolas' conscious effort to act as though he were still sighted seems very convincing to me.

Anyway, I am so enjoying your story. And delighted to hear that your daughter is doing well. I look forward to the next chapter!

Author Reply: Yes, that is absolutely right. Legolas does appear to be submitting, so our baddies believe they have control over him. Well, in reality they do have control over him, but things can change rather quickly sometimes, can't they?


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