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| To See A World by Nightwing | 17 Review(s) |
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| robinscat | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/24/2006 |
| I am not one to make comments on an authors writing. I take it as it is given, but I do like to respond with how the story makes me feel. My heart leaped with joy followed by trepidition when I saw the update. I had to wait until I was alone to read it. I love to see you continue the story, but I have a dreadful feeling in the pit of my stomach. Your descriptions are so vivid and compelling. You draw on all the senses, I can feel the collar around Legolas' neck, the chaffing on his writst, I feel his hoplessness, his dread of the torture to come, the small spark of hope he receives from Alun. HOw will I react to your descriptions of the torture both mental and physical? I keep hoping, preying that this is the chapter where Aragorn comes to the rescue. Alas, it is not to be this time. But at least Legolas got a small respite. And yes, Aragorn is human and needed time to recover. Thank you for putting that in, cause many authors tend to make him a superman, which is not realistic. Recovery is over, Aragorn where are you! And I will tell you that the pictures I have painted from your story are starting to get a might bit depressing. LOL. I didn't think I could paint a dungeon. or a burning cottage, or the inside of a wooden box. I am eagerly awaiting, and dreading another chapter. Thank you for sharing your gift. Robin Author Reply: Pictures? You are drawing pictures from this story? Wow. Can I start begging now? Is there some way I can see them? Thanks so much for such a nice review. I always scurry off with the stories I am reading too. I like privacy when I sit down to read them. | |
| Sadie | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/24/2006 |
| I'm so glad you have updated. This is one of my favourite stories. I admire you a lot as a writer, because I can see that you think about what you are writing, you look around, look for possibilities... and the text becomes much clearer every new chapter. Sorry, I am from Brazil, so my English is horrible. But I need to say that to you, how much I appreciate your job, how a see you as a terrific writer! I am glad you share another chapter with us. Thanks Sadie Author Reply: Your English is not horrible. It is very good! Thank you for your encouragement. That is what keeps me writing. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/24/2006 |
| So Legolas has two more allies. Good. I particularly liked the descriptions of how he had learned patient attentiveness. Author Reply: Thanks. I liked working up that part. I think waiting would be a rather large part of both court life and warrior life. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/24/2006 |
| I like Legolas's determination at the beginning of this chapter - that no matter what they do to him, he will resist for as long as he can, and feed them misinformation. He's realistic on what his chances will be, but not as despairing as before. Legolas's injuries continue to worry me. What is wrong with him that caused him to collapse like that? I'm glad he has another ally on his side - I like Brina. With her, Koryon and Alun, there may well be far more townspeople out there like them. Aragorn (when he does arrive!) may find more help than he expects. I think it's natural that she has spotted his blindness - she is a healer, after all! I'm glad your daughter is better. I laughed at your story about your blind classmate - it's odd how often in RL we get inspiration and the opportunity to research our fics. Author Reply: Hello Jay. Thank you for admiring the bravery of our elf. He's being as realistic and courageous as he can be. He figures his life is ended, but he will still protect his people. It is funny how we get RL help. I've been stalking another blind guy I've noticed who must work on the same college campus as I. Every time I spot him I start tailing him down the sidewalk. It's a wonder he hasn't whipped round and demanded to know why I keep following him! | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/23/2006 |
| Now I'm as interested in hearing about your classmate as I am in Legolas' predicament. But I'll concentrate on fiction for now. I'm with Lisette on this one -- it's good to see Legolas drawing on his training and discipline as he prepares for what he knows is coming. And really his plans: knowing that he will have to speak, deciding when and how much and what to say, show more of his strength than the physical torture alone would do. And that little anecdote about Legolas hiding underwater and breathing through a reed when the evil men were nearby . . . goodness, what a plot bunny that launched! I was hoping to see a bit of Aragorn in this chapter, but I agree with your reasoning for holding off on the Ranger. His time will come soon enough. I hope the poor dear doesn't have too bad a headache when he takes on the city guard single-handed, that's all. For all Legolas' skill in concealing his blindness, it makes sense that a healer would notice. And if he tells her, will she be able to help him? Not now, that is clear, but perhaps in the end of the story. There's still that fragment near his spine . . . yes, I know that the blindness is not the main point of the story. But it is a factor, and you have set it up so that he might be healed in the end. Please let him be healed. Just think of the opportunities for Elf-worship, the joy and beauty when he regains his sight! It's good to have you back. I hope that real life gives many opportunities to continue your writing in the future. Author Reply: Hey there! I thought I'd better explain what Aragorn was doing, as I know people are eager for his return. But it would be a rather dull chapter, as nothing of significance is happening with him yet. In between sleep sessions he's groaning and shivering and coughing up gunk. I think we can skip it. As for your last paragraph... yep. We may just be seeing a bit of light at the end of the elf's dark tunnel now. This darned story has to end some time! Well, I've been dying for an update from you, but we know where that stands. Wretched bastards. Grrr... feel free to send it to me early via email if you are so inclined! | |
| Eruwestial | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/23/2006 |
| HOORAY for your daughter!!! And thanks SO MUCH for yet another wonderful chapter. It made my night so very much better as I've a lot of work ahead of me tomorrow. I had no problem believing that folks missed Legolas's blindness, as we see what we expect to see. They were probably expecting an Elf to act differently anyway, so that would have explained away to them any oddities. It wouldn't occur to them that he'd be disabled, as they are so afraid of his abilities. How foolish to fear a blind Elf! Their own hubris would keep them from even considering the possibility, in my opinion. Again, I am SO glad to hear your daughter is doing well. HUGS and HAPPY DANCES for both of you. Eruwestial Author Reply: Hello there Eruwestial! I am hoping that the elf's mannerisms are another factor in his ability to hide his blindness. People will just think he weird because he's an elf, not that he's blind. See you next update. | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 40 on 1/23/2006 |
| Oh, I'm so glad to hear about your daughter. That must be such a weight lifting off your shoulders. I gather that she's not completely better, but is becoming so? In that case, I wish her the best of luck for more health. Legolas certainly has managed to find quite a brave little circle of friends. I get the feeling here that fewer and fewer people in the immediate area really believe that he had anything to do with this murder. If Ramhan and Malcovar can't fool the staff, they've got a problem. What the guard and the grandmother and Alun need to do is spread the word about this Elf. Clearly Ramhan's story does not hold much water, and if none of the villagers believe it, he'll be in a bad place. Which is just where we want him. The villagers are also very good at knowing what's been going on right outside of town. It's probably for the best that someone's been watching over Our Heroes all along, but it'll give Aragorn a stroke to discover that. Author Reply: My daughter is a good 90% better. We are delighted with her progress. Legolas is lucky to have found some friends. Of coure, Koryon knows he didn't commit murder, as he was one of the elf's abductors. The young man has a conscience and is feeling rather guilty about what he has done to Legolas. Legolas' allies are few, and the baddies control many people. It remains to be seen if such a small group can manage to turn events. | |