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Swan-song  by Lady Bluejay 2 Review(s)
demeter dReviewed Chapter: 10 on 7/29/2011
Oh, you have given us many good clues here! Inayah remembers noticing the "big, handsome Gondorian commander" noticing her. She heads out for the healer's tent, sees him turn away and thinks he did not notice her. Then she wonders why Amal has brought his new young wife with him to a battle zone just before she remembers her own husband being killed before she could conceive a child, and being stigmatized as barren even though her husband's second wife also never conceived. Based on Amal's respectful treatment both of his sister and Lotherial, I think he was trying to ensure that even if he got himself killed in that violent little police action, he bettered the chance of leaving his young wife pregnant, and thus reserving a place of honor in the eyes of their people. You have established a tradition now for your Princes of Dol Amroth. As young men, they are handsome lady magnets, but when they fall, they fall quite romantically, and quite hard. Erchirion has just saved Inayah from a single, real snake, not a band of two legged ones, like his Father and brothers. But save her he has. I even see parallels between Inayah and Aerin. We first meet both of them as the literate, cultured companions and protectors of younger, less self-confident women. And at the last, she tells Lotherial, "really, it is all right." I think she has fallen as much in love as the tough older brother has! And, her late husband was the barren one, not his wives. It may sometime become an issue between them that her husband was killed fighting against an army which Erchirion and his brothers were part of. Unless, of course, her husband really was just an arrangement out of duty! Hmm. This could get interesting.

Author Reply: You have found all the clues, and picked up on parallels I had not thought of!

Thanks for your great review.LBJ

AzureSkyeReviewed Chapter: 10 on 7/13/2011
Well....That was unexpected. Although I do think Lothi is jumping to conclusions. Inayah is a lovely character, and so different from the other women in your stories. She does deserve happiness this time around. I hope Lothiriel can bring her out of her shell. Wonderful as always, and can't wait for the next chapter!

Author Reply: Thanks for reviewing. Inayah was just supposed to just have a mention - but you know how these characters grow! LBJ

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