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| Creation Song of Ilúvatar by Fadesintothewest | 27 Review(s) |
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| Coriandra | Reviewed Chapter: 32 on 7/9/2005 |
| That was beautiful, but so sad which is a sure sign that Lenmana was never a Mary Sue. I find character death scenes heartbreaking if they're well written. It's impossible for me to feel this way about a Sue because they just aren't believeable. Thank you for taking as on this journal, I'm sure your other readers found it as moving as I did. | |
| Shemyaza | Reviewed Chapter: 32 on 4/27/2005 |
| This is an addendum to the earlier review. I finished your story and was intrigued with the usage of a lost soul from another world intruding into Middle-earth. You said at the start that you thought she might have MS qualities. Well, if she did, they weren't at all evident. Her presence in ME with the Elves was thoughtfully crafted and she was what all original characters should be in my opinion - i.e. a complement to the canon characters and someone who enriches the story and doesn't take it over for her/himself. She was afraid of the journey we all have to take after our lives have ended and wanted to hold on instead of finding who she truly was, which is not the sum total of our corporeal forms. I'm not religious, so I don't believe in heaven as such, but I have become more spiritual as time has gone on and believe that a spirit does fly towards it's real home when it leaves the body at the point of death. Author Reply: Thanks Shemyaza, I tried not to make her a MS, but I guess you always run a risk of that. The danger here was that I could make this character a double MS, in the context of Middle Earth and a sage Native American all knowing mystic, but I wanted to get away from that and instead explore her humanity through legolas. I myself also have a more spiritual outlook on life the older I have grown. Thanks for the review, and I am glad you enjoyed the story! | |
| Shemyaza | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 4/27/2005 |
| How could anyone take exception to such a sensitive depiction of the trials of the native American and especially the Chiricahua Apache and Hopi who were more sinned against than sinning? I find it fascinating that you're attempting to combine the two cultures with that of Middle-earth. It's very true that the nature of the native American being so close to the earth and the elements is far more in tune with the Elvish notions than modern western culture. Of course any OFC introduced is in danger of being a Mary Sue, but you have one thing on your side and that is the fact that you haven't yet got her interfering with the quest of the Ring or turning up at Elrond's council! I guess there's still time since I am only a couple of chapters into the story. On the other hand, the very nature of her culture may just make her character work, even if she does develop Mary Sue tendencies later on. She has an interesting enough background to dampen down any objectionable qualities. I'll read on and see where it goes. Author Reply: Ah the OFC Mary Sue problems, I thought it was an interesting enough venture to have a Native American OFC in the midst of the wood Elves. I am happy to see that you did read on. It is always satisfying to reach the end of a story whether writing or reading! Thanks again for the review! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 32 on 4/26/2005 |
| When I saw the notice for this update, I thought I must be seeing things! This was beautiful, Fades. I'm glad Lemnana found her way home again. And Legolas's words about love rang true. Author Reply: I know when I got around to it, I couldn't believe it myself! Too long away from a story I really liked working on it. Thanks for the review Daw! Legolas is all about love after all, as is Tolkien... Reminders for everyday life... patience and love! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 31 on 3/28/2004 |
| This is a fascinating account of how this particular non-MS managed to get into ME. There is magic here, strong magic, that is of the earth and of the elves and of her people too. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 31 on 3/24/2004 |
| I like how Glorfindel can see the state of Lenmana's lost spirit, and knows the need she has to find the halls of her forefathers - it reminds of the words Gandalf spoke to Theoden regarding Theodred's soul in movie-verse land - it sort of mirrors the idea here of the spirit finding its ways to the halls of its forefathers. Poor Legolas, though! You have left him hanging. I like the reference to him as the silver moon and the memories Glorfindel has of him storytelling. I hope life settles and look forward to the next chapter! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 30 on 2/12/2004 |
| Loved the images of Glorfindel singing to Legolas to help anchor him and the trees telling him to cling to color. They were very elfy. And, of course, I also enjoyed the concern that everyone showed for the injured Legolas but especially his father and brother. I'm so glad to see this story moving again. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 29 on 1/28/2004 |
| Glad to see you broke through the block! The effects of shadow are evil indeed, and I wonder why they target Legolas. Which reminds me, no killing off the elf! His situation seems most grave, and perhaps in this we will learn Lenmana's purpose. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 29 on 1/28/2004 |
| Yeah! You're back. This was a wonderful depiction of the effects of shadow. It's interesting how for Tolkien the psychological effect of the fear and despair was the primary weapon. But you leave us wondering how Legolas is doing! Bad Fades! | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 28 on 11/3/2003 |
| I think you capture the weight and despair of shadow well at the beginning, and we see the effects on Legolas. Being young, he probably does not have the defense against it that the others do, merely by experience, although he lives closer to it physically. Glorfindel's memory of Legolas as an elfling is a wonderful, light contrast to that shadow. The water and the sun and their dance - and better yet with a fully revealed golden one :D. Lenmana is interesting here, for I am not sure they speak of the same thing. I am not entirely sure what Legolas wants from her, or if she knows what she wants from him. Her moratilty is rushing and fleeting and interesting to him. His immoratlity intrigues her, but for different reasons. It will be interesting to see where Legolas' dreams take him.... | |