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| The Silence by Aldwen | 10 Review(s) |
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| Lady Forlong | Reviewed Chapter: 15 on 6/14/2024 |
| "...I still have both arms for my brothers." Aww -- group hug. I love this. (It may be too late to post this comment, but I didn't get around to reading this story until about 3 years after it was published, because I hadn't discovered this website yet, but I'll add a couple of other things, just in case you're still getting messages from your old stories): It was so sad that he was angry with Fingon for saving his life, even if he wasn't able to save all of him. I like to think that Meadhros should have/would have been grateful from the get-go. But I'm so glad they made up in a later chapter. And I think you got it right that Celebrimbor was stubborn. If not, then he might have listened to Galadriel (and Elrond And Gil-Galad AND Cirdan) when they tried to warn him not to trust "Annatar." BTW, forgive my use of names. I don't speak Quenya :) | |
| Renata | Reviewed Chapter: 20 on 4/2/2021 |
| Having read 'The Stronghold', I looked to see what else you wrote, and just finished reading this story. Backwards order, lol, but better late than never! Another enjoyable story (is it wrong to use that adjective when so much of the story is about suffering?). Something that I particularly enjoyed about it were the intricate descriptions of the natural world. It was amusing that it took Celebrimbor so long to realize that he loved Middle Earth; as a reader viewing the world through his eyes, I fell in love with the natural beauty and flow of the seasons almost instantly. (But then, I love the mountains, and I love gardens - both the kind that are planted and tended by Man, and the natural gardens planted and tended by God and His creatures.) Author Reply: Thank you sincerely! Yes, I was interested to explore the relationships we build with the world, often being unaware of what kind or relationships these are. This topic comes, in part, from my own experience - as I studied abroad I thoroughly hated (or thought that I hated) the place where I was studying. I was sad and homesick and wanted nothing else than to go back home as soon as possible. But when, after one year, I had to return... Only then I realized how much I had grown attached to my temporary study place. I do not think it is wrong to enjoy stories about suffering. After all, nearly all Tolkien's works fall in this category, and through suffering the heroes grow and come to deeper understanding and hope. That is probably why these stories are still so relevant to us, especially in the current time... | |
| atealgirl | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 3/23/2021 |
| I was rereading this story in preparation to read your new one and got distracted by the Valacira being westward when it is part of the Big Dipper which is so near the North star. I wasn't sure if you were a little inaccurate or brilliant in keeping in mind the change of constellations over long periods of time. I spent an hour trying to figure this out with scientific Googling and have determined that you are brilliant (whether on purpose or not) because the star that is the north star changes and about 10,000 years ago it would be in quite a different place so the Valacirca could be westward. Also, I realized that Elves would see a lot more stars than we can and how amazing that would be. Sorry for this irrelevant rambling I will give normal reviews of your new story soon. Thanks, atealgirl Author Reply: Hi! Thank you, this is by no means irrelevant! I must admit that in this case I was brilliant quite accidentally; astronomy is definitely not one of my strong sides. :) As I wrote that part I wanted the Valacirca to be westward for a purely symbolic purpose. Aldwen | |
| atealgirl | Reviewed Chapter: 20 on 2/26/2021 |
| I really like this story. You portray Celebrimbor as an intriguing and likeable character. He is in a unique position as the only child of the Feanorians who is a part of the effects of the Oath without having taken it. I like how you show how in love with Middle-earth he is. Interesting idea that the Oath binds Nelyofinwe to be unable to fade despite the pain. I like how you show the differences between the two camps by the way they are built and whether or not they have horses. The image of Findekano walking balk in the rain was a poignant one. I would love more Celebrimbor stories from you, especially the events in Nargothrond, or anything else you want to write. Thanks, atealgirl Author Reply: Thank you for the review, it is really encouraging! I am very glad you like the story! Celebrimbor is an interesting character, with so little actually written about him. For me, he really is likeable. I cannot imagine the person who made the Three Rings any other way. And he would have loved Middle-earth, otherwise he would not have stayed after the War of Wrath. Thanks again! Aldwen | |
| Ellynn | Reviewed Chapter: 20 on 2/19/2021 |
| Nicely done. :) Have you considered writing a story about Celebrimbor's life in Eregion? Author Reply: Thank you! :) I have, actually, and there are also other time-points and events I am interested in exploring; we really know so little of him. There is something started still about the First Age, and I may post it in a while, but we shall see how it goes with completing. The Primary World is currently very demanding in terms of time and effort. :-D | |
| Ellynn | Reviewed Chapter: 12 on 2/5/2021 |
| Well written, it's interesting! ;) P.s. I suggest you find a beta before publishing, to correct some minor grammar and punctuation things. They are small, but why not fix them if possible? :) It always helps when someone else checks the text, especially for us who are not native English speakers. ;) (No, English is not my mother tongue either :) ) Author Reply: Thank you for the review and the suggestion! I completely agree, beta reading is very helpful, but finding someone will take time which I do not have at the moment. This story is now finished, and I want to upload the rest too, once I have started to publish it. Sorry for the errors in the remaining eight chapters! :) | |
| Ellynn | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 2/3/2021 |
| very good and plausible description of the awakening. Author Reply: Thank you! | |
| Ellynn | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 2/3/2021 |
| Haha, this is not fair. :) Will we readers ever find out? Nicely done, btw. P.s. Sorry, I obviously messed up the timeline in my head. I'll have to memorize it correctly :) Author Reply: Thanks and sorry for that...! :) Honestly, I have no idea. I haven't found out myself yet. Writing for me works in a way that probably breaks all rules - I kind of 'discover' things, without a specific plan or a clear idea where I want to go with the story. So I may discover that too. Or not. We shall see. | |
| Ellynn | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 2/2/2021 |
| I like this so far :) Your Celebrimbor is a nice, interesting person. I do have one question, though, concerning the first chapter. Wasn't Maedhros capture quite some time AFTER the rest of the Noldor arrived to Middle-earth? My Silmarillion is out of reach now, but I have some blurred memory that Maedhros and Fingolfin had a conversation after Fearor's death, in which Maedhros says to his uncle that he (Fingolfin) should be the high king of all the Noldor, as he is now the oldest living of their house. If your time-line is changed deliberately, then disregard the second part of my review. ;) Author Reply: Thank you! I am very glad you like Celebrimbor! I have always pictured him as a nice person, but quite stubborn also. :) Concerning your question - no, this timeline is according to the text. Feanorians came first, by the ships, Feanor perished almost at once, and Maedhros was captured very soon after that, during the fake parley offered by Morgoth. Fingolfin's host came to Middle-earth much later, as they had to cross the Grinding Ice. Maedhros surrendered the kingship over all Noldor after his rescue by Fingon. | |
| Camp6311 | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 2/1/2021 |
| Beautiful story telling, and very well written. I am enjoying it very much. Loved this bit: "Yet even though in my mind I denied myself the solace that Endórë was offering me, my heart somehow accepted it, and my mood was lightened" The heart often knows what the mind refuses to accept. Author Reply: Thank you so much! :) Yes, it is so, especially when being out in the nature. We somehow take what we need at the moment, often being ourselves unaware what it is exactly that makes us feel better. | |