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| Black Mountain by White Wolf | 132 Review(s) |
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| Eruanna | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/15/2004 |
| Ooh! Promising start! //It had been over three hundred years since the last brave---or foolish---souls had ventured to its black granite slopes.// //"And the barest suspicion that they may have died unnatural deaths means we should go there rather than simply avoiding the place."// //Tell me I will not regret this." "Would you believe me, if I did?" "No."// All great lines! And then there's the classic why?-because-it's-there Mt. Everest thing...well done! And I don't think I *want* to see Thranduil in a frenzy. Interesting mental image. ;-) I'm glad that you took a chapter to set this up with an argument, instead of saying something like, "Aragorn and Legolas had a long argument about it and Aragorn finally won." Or, "Aragorn and Legolas were on the way to a big, black, sinister mountain. A few days before..." And so on, and so on. This is much better. Good job. ;-) More soon, please! Author Reply: I'm glad you like the beginning. I'm also glad you liked those lines. They seemed to me to be so in-character. I love the exchanges those two often have with each other. Thranduil in a frenzy would be terrifying. If I witnessed it, I would want to be in a Derk corner where he couldn't see me. :o) I agree with you abut setting the story up. I think, especially in this case, it was important to do. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/15/2004 |
| Sounds interesting and scary. But I can't see how they are going to get permission to go - from either Thranduil or Elrond. I like Legolas's take on what makes a lie. Much less jesuitical than Aragorn's. Nice honest elf. Look forward to the next chapter. Author Reply: I hope the remainder of the story will be as interesting and scary as it sounds to you. I'll sure try to accomplish that. The next chapter will reveal the permission assure. Legolas has a much stricter idea of honesty, though Aragorn is, as we all know, a very honorable man. He just fudges wish the truth sometimes. | |