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| Going, Going, Gone by Lindelea | 47 Review(s) |
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| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 8/9/2004 |
| I think the hair answers the other point too! Pippin has a very interesting perspective on life - I think between him and Merry you have an original, inventive and practical combination. Invisible cream - how about some visible cream? If he is invisible, but not transparent - what is the effect when he stands between someone and what they are looking at? Surely he would be silhouetted? Author Reply: Invisible but not transparent... I gave this quite a bit of thought while writing the story. No, he wouldn't be silhouetted. He is like a clear glass filled with water for those to see who can. Since it's a spell, or magic, or whatever you'd call it, people see through him but not *into* him. Thus he can eat and the food disappears once it's inside his mouth. If he were to swallow something more substantial, say, a penny, it would disappear from the moment it went into his mouth (providing he closed his mouth) until it emerged again, after passing through his system. Like having "invisible" cream smeared over your skin. If you're invisible you cannot block someone's view of what's behind you. But not transparent. Frankly, I didn't want to imagine the unsavoury sight of food being chewed, swallowed, and digested. Poor Frodo. He doesn't even cast a shadow on a sunny day. Magic can be quite convenient. It allows you to ignore laws of physics and have precisely the effect you want in a story. Such power: I try not to abuse it too much. | |
| Lindorien | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/8/2004 |
| Okay, Lin, I'm having a Summary Version of LOTR moment here: Merry: Do you think this could have anything to do with the morgul blade? duh. Sorry - I'm remembering all the times people said the word 'queer' to describe everything from Really Scary Stuff to the weather. Okay, I'm reading on, just had to break and point this up. He brought his hands down upon his knees with a slap. 'Well,' he said, 'I was forgetting why I came.' Okay - that's probably not meant as funny, but it is. Oh well, Frodo's disappearing. Oh, by the way...lalalalalala. And Tom BOMBADILLO. Want some poetry. I'll have to come up with some you know. I see 'Tom Bombadil' and it's almost a Pavlovian Response. After one of these encounters, hearing Frodo sigh, he said, 'You know, cousin, with a tin cup you could make quite a lot of money as a beggar...' Coffee spray... You DID write Bombadil poetry. But it's SERIOUS Bombadil poetry. Is that possible? And you didn't use Armadillo ONCE. harumph! I read on... Lindorien | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 8/8/2004 |
| This has nothing to do with your story (sorry) and more to do with the - h'mmm, wastes. No, isn't it funny how books tend to avoid the topic! (Not). But one of the criticisms some strange people were making of Harry Potter is that it is never mentioned that HP has baths/showers or cleans his teeth - well, how surprising. Novels obviously require several chapters describing the bathing habits of the main characters. And how they deal with athlete's foot. And their visits to have their hair cut. Nobody in the movies ever locks their car doors either. | |
| Lindorien | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 8/8/2004 |
| Okay, there's something very hobbity about this whole thing. There's Rosie coming up with all the practical solution and her and Sam just kinda keepin' on keepin' on. maybe it's cause I'm still waiting for the coffee to brew, but this is really giving me a chuckle. Lindorien | |
| Lindorien | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 8/8/2004 |
| Oh dear. It's early on a Sunday morning and I'm chuckling here in the bed and trying not to wake the husband. Also thinking I should go make sure the kids are fed and not burning down the house or something, but this is FUNNY. Like the Shire's own version of the invisible man! No head! I love it! Okay, okay, this is quirky. I like quirky. Lindorien | |
| Lindorien | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/8/2004 |
| This one has me chuckling even more. I'm trying to stop biting my nails? Look ma, no hands? I don't know where you're going with this, Lin, but this disappearing in stages is pretty darned funny. And Frodo and Rosie at the end. On to the next chapter...Lindorien | |
| esamen | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 8/7/2004 |
| Well, I have to say, you have made a believer out of me. I admit to being skeptical during the first few chapters . . . but you've got me hook, line and sinker now. Marvelous, marvelous! A whole new vector in the Middle-earth tales. This is great! I can't wait for the next chapter now! And I can't believe how good this story is. Now, you had better tell us pretty soon what Celeborn wrote . . . and give Frodo's invisible hair a trim . . . or we'll all have to come over there and do something drastic to you. Happy writing, esamen. Author Reply: Well, thank you! You make me want to see just how far I can stretch your credulity... how about a tale where all the hobbits start slinging modern or semi-modern slang, and yet stay completely in character? Not sure? Well, it's next on the list for posting, after the last chapter of this one goes up. Let me know what you think. *g* (It was great fun to write, anyhow) Yes, Celeborn's news, and Frodo's haircut are in upcoming chapters. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 8/7/2004 |
| Rosie is remarkably intelligent - Rosie for Thain! She understands Pippin much better than his father does. And she is right about how he puts Frodo at his ease. Merry is more serious and sensible, but he wants to make things work. Pippin is better at accepting them as they are and working round them. I wonder if Frodo's hair becomes visible again when it is cut from his head? And what about his - h'mm - wastes? What does Celeborn say? Author Reply: Hmmm. Wastes. D'y'know, that sort of thing was never mentioned in the type of cultured writing I attempt to emulate. D'you suppose they didn't have any, in those days? (No, they had chamber pots and buckets that they emptied out the windows into the streets of London... but that was Dickens' time, not Tolkien's... Still, JRRT does not treat the subject, that I've noticed.) Anyhow, have not given much thought to wastes. Don't suppose they had comfort stops along the route on the Quest, either, do you? What happened when a hobbit needed, um... to visit Mrs. Murphy, or to see a man about a horse, and there they were in the middle of the Anduin River? Of course, they were on short commons by then so perhaps it wasn't a problem. D'you suppose lembas is binding? What if Merry needed to "see a man about a horse" on that long ride with Dernhelm. Would Dernhelm have said, "But we've already got a horse!"? Perhaps I should post all this at Wonderland instead of in a review. It might spark a spirited discussion. Then again it might fall flat. Hmmm, you have anticipated a plot point in your questions. So you'll see, soon. If not in the next chapter, then the one following, I'm pretty sure. Four chapters left, isn't it? Math is not my strong point, which is how I managed to make Estella and Diamond the same age though they were born ten years apart. Anyhow, thanks for reviewing! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 8/6/2004 |
| Do you know, this is almost enough to make me like Tom Bombadil. (And, I suppose, Goldberry.) Normally he just seems like a pantomime addition to a serious play - like putting Coco the Clown in The Duchess of Malfi. I'm not surprised Merry was shocked - I thought he dealt with it quite well. Author Reply: LOL, I have to admit I always skim over the Tom Bombadil part when I re-read the book... to write this, I had to comb it carefully to try to pick up Tom and Goldberry's speech patterns. Difficult. I nearly took the easy way and left off the chapter, with only a reference to the visit and the fact that Tom could see Frodo, just as he had when Frodo had put the Ring on. But I managed, somehow. Whew. Thanks. | |
| Auntiemeesh | Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 8/6/2004 |
| This is a very interesting twist to Frodo's life story. It makes perfect sense of course, following up on Gandalf's thought that he would become like a clear glass, visible for those with eyes to see (or whatever exactly he said). Frodo seems to be remarkably calm about the whole thing. I certainly do feel for Rosie, walking in to find a headless Frodo, lol. I can't wait to read more! Author Reply: Yes, that "clear glass" thought was the seed for this story. Frodo is awfully calm, isn't he? Perhaps he's in shock, or hasn't taken it all in, or the implications haven't hit him yet, or else he's been through so much that this seems minor by comparison... Thanks for commenting! | |