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| While There's Breath... by Lindelea | 13 Review(s) |
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| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/20/2005 |
| That's a very sad run through poor Ferdi's life. Abandoned, one way or another, by everyone whom he trusted and loved. Thank goodness he's now got Nell to stand by him - even if he can still hardly believe it. And Pippin - there for him regardless of the dangers to himself. I'm glad to see he is thinking better of Pippin as he looks beyond the irresponsible tween - and also looks to Pippin in the wider world. (I still find Pippin in Runaway to have taken about fourteen large leaps backwards. And Merry, come to that.) Pippin is excellent in a crisis - just as well he had to live through so many. I think it's everyday boredom that gets to be a bit much for him. Although, thinking about it, with his Lungs, I don't suppose there are many days to discard at the moment. I hope he doesn't go down with anything too serious at this point. No elven flask of magic juice. No handy Strider. He'd better stick with a slight chill. Thank goodness the cavalry arrived when they did. Author Reply: Well, yes, and that's one of the reasons I couldn't stand to look at "Runaway" for months after writing it. Someone said Pippin was OOC and because I felt tenative about the story in the first place, I internalised that and winced every time I thought of the story. Yet Jo had done such an excellent job, rescuing it, that I couldn't bear to delete it. Ah, well. I'll just chalk it up to "delayed stress". Knew of a Vietnam Vet who'd put his life together pretty well, only to have it fall apart when his life got very stressful. He had a hard time rebuilding afterwards, too. Guess that'll be my excuse for Pippin's and Merry's backwards leaps. Shellshock? Slight chill, yes, I think that's the ticket, amazingly enough. Wonder what's in those vile draughts? Echinacea and garlic, zinc and vitamin C for starters? Airborne? | |
| Hai Took | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/20/2005 |
| Gracious! How difficult for both of them. I have always enjoyed your Ferdi's character, I can't remember if I have told you that or just planned too. He is just a bit sarcastic, in his speach and such, like right before he was completely under water. That would be such a strange way to try and stay alive. It's a good thing neither paniced, I think I probably would have under such a tense circumstance. Ferdi's view of his life and the metephore abou the ceiling coming down and loosing all of his supports through the years, well done. It was also very interesting to see if it in Ferdi's POV, if a rather short one. Then him deciding that he was going to give up so that Pippin could get out, very noble, but I'm sure it must have been a blow to think that Pippin had given him up. Looking forward to more! Author Reply: Yes, I love Ferdi when he feels as if there's nothing to lose and lets his tongue go. I don't know if I can bring myself to read "Sometimes a Great Notion" or to see the movie based on it (don't remember the name of the movie, if it's the same or not), knowing that *that* scenario had a tragic end. Considering Ferdi's last memory during the crisis was Pippin abandoning him, and Pippin's last part of being in the river was of being forced away from Ferdi, breaking his promise in a sense, the angst is not yet completely resolved. But we're close. Thanks! | |
| Connie B. | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 1/20/2005 |
| Shwuph, at least they're out of the stream. Thank goodness. That was very interesting seeing Ferdi's view of events in his life. Kind of ironic that the one person he had come to view as hard to trust was the one person he had to have faith in to survive. He must have thought his lack of trust had been correct when he felt Pippin's hand leave him. I wonder what his reaction will be when he finds out that they had to pull Pippin away from him. And then there's poor Pippin. He was so determined to fulfill his promise to Ferdi that he was willing to sacrofise his own life to do it. Even though he knows Ferdi's safe, he's probably going to feel like he didn't keep his part of the bargane because he was pulled away from Ferdi before they'd got him out of the water. Pippin is always so hard on himself. Needless to say, I got a lot out of this chapter. Looking forward to what comes next. I also have to hand it to you. It can't be easy making each title match a line in the song. Thanks. Connie B. Author Reply: So encouraging, to see your review! Definitely ironic, as you say, that the one person Ferdi had to depend on was the one he saw as undependable. Let's hope he's past all that now. You're right about the chapter titles! This can't be one of those mega-stories -- there just aren't enough lines to support too many chapters! Thanks! | |