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| Pitfalls of the Palantir by Haleth | 253 Review(s) |
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| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/17/2005 |
| I must say, as a southern girl or GRITS--Girl raised in the south, I would have fared no better than poor Haleth on skis. My backside ached in sympathy. Inglor is a hoot! His innocence and bewilderment is charming to everyone but Haleth. Well, and his looks are appreciated too by the females of the Lossoth. He's like an alien that has been dropped off by the mother ship for a little anthropological study of the strange creatures know as human. The relationship between the two is just great. You've captured the 'spirit' of these two with such vivid detail. They're both so easy to see, but the internal dialogue of Haleth is so dry and semi-disgusted with the whole set up that I can see her expressions. So, Inglor is bowling. To win a palantir. And he's not certain what he'll wager. This should be good. I'm looking forward to this tale continuing. It's just delightful. Karen Author Reply: Thank-you. If there's a way for Inglor to get himself into trouble, rest assured he'll certainly find it. Your description of Inglor as an alien studying human behavior is pretty close to the mark. | |
| DAYNA | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/17/2005 |
| OOOOOOoooooo, more intrigue! :) love it love it!!! I still want the walrus back, tho. ::giggle:: :D Author Reply: Thanks! Odob will make a reappearance, but not for a long time. | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/17/2005 |
| Again with the sly humor! Haleth's grumpiness plays well against Inglor's seeminly innocent affect. The image of the children and women flocking around Inglor was, well, realistic in a dryly funny way, as was the ski tracks puntuated by body part prints. I have a feeling that the palantir bowling will go badly. Looking forward to the next. TF Author Reply: I have a confession to make. The body prints in the snow was inspired by a personal experience, although it was snow shoes instead of skis. It was funny to look at...afterwards. | |
| Lackwit | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/17/2005 |
| I've read this story on your website, and am ecstatic you are sharing it here. From the chapter: **Two figures sat on a desolate, rocky beach. Cold, grey waves lapped upon the stony shore. The first was tall and fair. His golden hair shone in the sun, his bearing was straight and proud, his clothing immaculate. The second was completely obscured by a cloud of biting insects.** Hello, Haleth! What an introduction! :) These two make a wonderful pair. Author Reply: Hello, Lackwit. It's good to see you again. These characters were a lot of fun to write. I'm cleaing up the story as it's posted here. Haleth | |
| DAYNA | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/11/2005 |
| Very interesting, Haleth. Does Haleth share in your name only, or in being as well? ::giggle:: I'm trying to figure out where this is going and what these two mean to the reader and to the story... but I do like it. I just don't like to think overly much when I read, I guess. ::wink:: Author Reply: It's a good question as many writers strongly identify with their characters. In this case, though, the answer is no. The name sharing is due to sheer laziness. I have a terrible time coming up with names and was too shiftless to think of another one. Haleth | |
| The Karenator | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/10/2005 |
| I admit it! I've already read this on another site, but I'm happily reading again. I'm so glad to see you post this on SoA. I loved your characters, your plot, your dialogue and your wonderful writing style. This reads so easily and it's terribly funny. A delightful and thoroughly original tale. I'm looking forward to trailing along on the travels of Haleth and Inglor again. Karen Author Reply: Thank-you. I'm glad to hear it's worth a second read. I'm trying to polish the text so that it reads more smoothly. | |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/10/2005 |
| This is an intriguing tale and you have the most interesting,ironic, quietly hilarious style. I'm hooked. TF Author Reply: Thank-you. I'm glad that you're enjoying the story. It certainly was a lot of fun to write. Haleth | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/4/2005 |
| Poor Odob - after all that work, the darn clam got away. He needs to think of it as a great 'one that got away' story to tell his grandchildren. I really could see this walrus banging and pounding on the palantir, too. I have been watching and reading about mantis shrimp's breaking open clams and anything else they like (in coral reef aquariums), but I think Odob would be even more amusing. Author Reply: Thank-you, Nilmandra I can picture an ancient and venerable walrus with only one, yellowed tusk, lying on a rock, basking in the sun while all of the little walrus pups gather around to hear his clam hunting stories. I'm curious. How do mantis shrimp break things apart? I wouldn't have thought they'd be either big enough or strong enough to be capable of very much. Haleth | |
| Leaward | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/3/2005 |
| LOL ...walrus-handled it ... wonderful description! I've often wondered this myself, what would have happened if a Palantir found its way onshore. I love the idea of the Odob -- who better! What an interesting plot-bunny to watch hatch. Author Reply: Thank-you, Leaward. It would be interesting to read a serious story on the effects a palantir would have. Denethor certainly proved they were perilous to use. The plot bunnies are already multiplying and hopping off in different directions. Haleth | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/3/2005 |
| beady little walrus eyes, walrus-handled, vague walrus hope You have a way with words. Better yet, the chapter is short, lending itself to reading without interruption. Interruption is the bane of my fanfic existence. But a common bane. An all-too-oft repeated bane. In other words, a main bane. Glad the walrus was not affected by looking into the oyster or clam or bright as-yet-unnamed (except perhaps in the story title) thingie. This could be interesting. Author Reply: Thank-you, Lindelea. I can empathise with a person subject to many interruptions. No walruses (walrii?) were harmed in the writing of this prologue. Haleth | |