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| A Lesser Treason by Jay of Lasgalen | 45 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/23/2005 |
| Ah, It seeks another victim, does It? Beware, Elrohir--beware! Excellent image of the lure the Ring might have taken. Author Reply: :( Poor Elrohir. He's in trouble here. He wouldn't have been tempted by power or glory - but a way for his sister to retain her immortality? For Imladris never to fade? You can see he'd be tempted :( | |
| periantari | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/22/2005 |
| As others have said, this is a very intriguing idea~ I really like your description of Elrohir's feelings and his feelings of inferiority to Elladan and his great desire to make everyone proud of him by doing great deeds. I can't wait for more! You left us quite a cliff-hanger. :) Good job in this~ =) Author Reply: Cliff-hangers are good!! :) When I first had the idea for this story, Elrohir's petty jealousies of Elladan -jealousies he hasn't even thought about for years - were an important part of it, though I don't think he wants glory and pride. He just wants his family to be safe :( Thanks for the review! | |
| Danina | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/21/2005 |
| Oooooooooooooooooh. This is very intriguing, whether it goes AU (i.e, he DOES it) or not. A great exploration of what one of Elrond's sons might have gone through...and the way the Ring could appeal most especially to someone who KNEW who bore the Three. This conflict between Elrond's duty as steward of Vilya and of Middle-Earth and Elrohir's desire -- so simple, so understandable! -- to keep his home and regain his mother. And you started with "Murder In The Cathedral"!! Squee!! Author Reply: Thanks! I thought it was an interesting idea to explore, especially as I've not seen anyone else consider it. I think the Ring could find a way to make anyone vulnerable to it - poor Elrohir's not immune. Vilya, and Elrohir's suppressed thoughts about his father's possession of that ring, adds an intrguing dimension. Glad you liked the quote, too - it was just right for this story. | |
| Lianna | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/21/2005 |
| When I first saw the Fellowship of the Ring movie (I had not read the LOTR books at that time), I expected that after Boromir, other members of the Fellowship would be tempted by the Ring, one by one, each in his own way. Of course, I know now that Tolkien chose a different storyline. But it's interesting to think about the effect that the Ring could have on various people in Tolkien's universe. I wouldn't have thought of Elrohir as a likely victim of Ring lust, but why not? I'm sure that the Ring could find a personalized way to appeal to anyone. Now I'm wondering whether Elrohir will overcome this on his own or whether someone else -- perhaps someone with more knowledge of Rings of Power -- will intervene. Author Reply: The temptation of the Ring is an issue I would have liked to see Tolkien explore a little more. Apart from Gollum, we only see glimpses (with Bilbo and Galadriel) of what the Ring could have done to other characters. I don't think of Elrohir as a likely victim either - which is why he was so totally unprepared. He didn't expect it. Now, what will happen next? | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/20/2005 |
| Oh this is so intriguing! I'd not considered Elrohir as being tempted--but he'd certainly be as much a target as anyone else. I have to say that the sorts of temptations the Ring is offering would be dreadfully hard to overcome. Not that I doubt he will--after all you did not say this was AU. And I love the use of the quote, and the way you reversed it--beautiful, absolutely. Author Reply: No, it's not AU - after all, do you really think I could write evil!Elrohir? I don't think an elf like Elrohir would be in the least tempted by power or glory - but a way to keep his family safe, to preserve his home - that would be the way to lure him in. Clever Ring. Glad you liked the quotation - it was one I looked up, and it seemed perfect. | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/20/2005 |
| Wow. This is very atmospheric. And such an interesting premise too. You really captured the sense of Elrohir’s restlessness as events move inexorably forward around him, and of the innate peace of Imladris being disturbed as it never has before. His fears and regrets are very understandable but there’s a sense of despair in him that tells us that this is more than just his own thoughts. It was both fascinating and frightening to see how the ring works on Elrohir’s mind, playing on his doubts enough to separate him from his family, from his brother, and bringing him here to Frodo. It manages to suggest such awful things about his father and uses the one thing that must still haunt him – his mother’s torment, and yet at the same time uses his deep love for his family and his home to tempt him. Elrohir already knows what Vilya alone can do so how tempting it must be to think of what the One Ring can do together with Vilya. Very clever. You’ve made this scarily believable. The last paragraph is just chilling. I very much look forward to seeing where you go with this. Author Reply: While planning this chapter, I decided that Elrohir's strengths would be his love for his brother, his father, his sister - but the Ring, of course, managed to change them into weaknessess. It started him wondering 'what if ...', and questioning his father's wisdom :( You’ve made this scarily believable. Thank you! It's what I wanted you to feel. | |
| VIcki_Turner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/20/2005 |
| OMGoodness! This is an amazing story and i'm extremely interested in seeing how its gonna play out! Author Reply: Thanks! The next part has about two pages written so far - I want to know how it ends too! | |
| Rose Sared | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/20/2005 |
| Oh, I do hate that ring and its whispering. Image how guilty he is going to feel for even considering such things - bah. Great writing Jay. Rose Author Reply: Yes, poor Elrohir - when he comes to his senses (and he will, of course) he'll feel really bad about this :( He never imagined that the Ring could affect *him*. | |
| Alice | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/20/2005 |
| Okay, now that cliff hanger was just mean. Very interesting story though. Author Reply: :) I like cliffhangers. Regular readers know that :) Glad you liked this!! | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 11/20/2005 |
| Uh oh - that is quite alarming! These thoughts are certainly not like Elrohir - he is obviously not aware the ring tries to seduce him! Now I am truly worried what will happen, although I can't imagine Elrohir would kill or even truly harm Frodo! Please update soon!! Author Reply: Originally I put a mention about the Ring in the summary, but then deleted it, because Elrohir was not aware of what it was doing to him. You think I can't do Evil!Elrohir? *Sigh* You could be right ... | |