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| A Midsummer Night's Dream by Jay of Lasgalen | 14 Review(s) |
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| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Oh, good. Everyone got out. I figured Elrohir would be safe -- he's a smart cookie and he listens to his brother -- but to have both Elves and both horses out is an added bonus. Whenever Elrond shows up, he can turn his full attention to the kids instead of having to deal with the dead. The stable's a complete loss, but that's not important right now. Author Reply: I knew from the start that no-one would die - Aradan is the sort of character I'd like to use again, so I couldn't kill him! After the zoo fire, I couldn't kill any of the horses, either. There are injuries that need treating, but nothing too severe. They were lucky - things could have been far worse, and it's thanks to Elladan's warning that they weren't. Yes, the stable's gone - but it can be rebuilt. | |
| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Excellent! I have no suggestions for improving this chapter! I am particularly pleased at the realistic portrayal of the fire, Elrohir's resourcefulness, and the cold water treatment of his burned hands. Details of the scene, characterizations and motives, animal behavior, even barn construction---outstanding! Thank you. | |
| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| Excellent! I have no suggestions for improving this chapter! I am particularly pleased at the realistic portrayal of the fire, Elrohir's resourcefulness, and the cold water treatment of his burned hands. Details of the scene, characterizations and motives, animal behavior, even barn construction---outstanding! Thank you. Author Reply: Thank you! I hope the details were convincing - I want to make readers feel the heat and smoke. As I've never been in a fire (thank God!), and know little about horses, most of this was guesswork. Water in a horse trough may not be the ideal treatment for burns, but its all they've got at the moment. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 3/6/2006 |
| That reaction of anger when the danger is past is well done - amazing how the range of emotions can be run in such a short time - adrenaline driven fear and action, then despair, then a second burst of adrenaline, then relief mixed with anger, and finally, at the end, there is just exhaustion. Now that Elrohir's adrenaline has passed, he will see how hurt he might really be. Hopefully Elladan will see the vision did aid them - much as Galadriel speaks about her mirror. The information may aid you, but the knowledge is of what is or maybe, and foresight is a poor thing to base decisions on. Author Reply: I thought Elladan's anger towards Elrohir would be a realistic response. Relief can do odd things to us. Elrohir, too, is now beginning to feel the pain of his burnt hands, which he didn't even notice at the time. When Elrohir explains how he used Elladan's vision and warning to save him and Aradan, Elladan is going to feel a lot better about his visions - they're not useless after all. I suppose it's another source of information to help in making decisions, but not the only factor. | |