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| During a journey in the dark... by Thundera Tiger | 72 Review(s) |
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| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/12/2003 |
| Another good chapter, Thundera. I liked the inclusion of the songs. Gimli's quiet appreciation of them was a nice touch. I've always felt cheated somewhat that Tolkien never elaborated how Gimli and Legolas became friends. I hope you will continue to include these little moments that explain how they were able to become friends in Lothlorien. The expanded fight scene was very nicely done. I'm looking forward to your next chapter of The Fellowship of the Ring Enhanced. :-) LKK Author Reply: I'm so bad at replying to reviews! So very bad. Sorry this is so late in coming to you, but I've resolved to do better in the future. Anyway, glad you liked the inclusion of songs. We've got a few more coming up, and as they were such an integral part of Tolkien's world, I can't leave them out. Thanks for the review! | |
| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/11/2003 |
| I wish your bumping into each other scene was in Jackson's movie, Thundera. I would have loved to see it. Not that I really needed to see it with my eyes, your writing allowed me to see it mentally so wonderfully did you portray it. Putting the reader inside Legolas' mind during the Moria debate was an interesting choice. I liked it. We hear so little of Legolas' thinking during the debate in the book, just his one line. It was nice to read an interpretation of what he was thinking at the time. Good story beginning! LKK | |
| Hai | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/8/2003 |
| What a wonderful surprise to find an update to this story! Something I love is your stories usually have long chapters! I hope more isn't too long in coming though. Why did Merry freeze up the way he did? That "fight or flight" type thing, I don't know I heard about it once, I have never been scared enough for adrenaline to kick in very hard anyway. Who all is hurt? You mentioned Pippin bleeding, and that Aragorn seemed to be favoring one of his legs. Oh, dear do let them all be okay! I love how you have fleshed out this scene. In the books I always feel it is too short for what all happens! Do you know how long you are going to write for htis story? Through Moria? Aragorn's dream/prediction was pretty creepy! Yet another book aspect that you have used and expanded on remarkably well! It is Aragorn, right, who doesn't want Gandalf to go into Moria? I have began rereading them so I will find out eventually. You are doing so wonderfully! Thank you so much for the time you use on these! Looking forward to LOTS more! Author Reply: Apologies for the belated reply to the review! I really ought to join a support group for things like this. Anyway, to answer your questions, Merry's response was very much in keeping with something I've experienced myself. Right before adrenaline kicks in, your body sometimes goes into shock to the extent that you can't even breathe. It's almost as scary as whatever it is that spooked you. Rather unnerving, to be honest. Moving on, I'm going to get the Fellowship all the way through Moria but I'll stop before we hit Lothlorien. I'm not sure exactly where in there I'll stop, but it will be before Nimrodel. And it is indeed Aragorn who doesn't want Gandalf going into Moria, though to be honest, the rest of the Fellowship (with the exception of Gimli) isn't too keen on the idea, either. Thanks for the reviews and the questions! | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/8/2003 |
| Oh, very very nice. I knew you'd do wonderfully with the warg fight. Gandalf's line at the end is just perfect. As far as Gimli's song goes--I think it works to do something like what you have with Legolas' songs (and I love your idea about Elladan and Elrohir making up the tra-la-la-lilly song, seems just the thing they'd do to annoy people) i.e. have a few stanzas but no need to write the whole long thing out. Focus on the impact it has on the listeners--they're emotions (particularly, I imagine, Legolas' reaction). Should work great. Thank you so much for another wonderful story! Author Reply: I'm very late in replying to this, and for that I apologize and hope you can forgive me. Sorry! Anyway, I like your suggestion for Gimli's song in Moria. It's kind of what I had planned already, but I wasn't sure how people would react so I did it first with Legolas's song. Thanks for the confirmation. I'll go ahead and do that. My plan for that part of the story is to tell it from the perspective of one of the hobbits, but we'll see Legolas's perspective on it, too. He's got quite a lot to think about in the dark, after all. | |
| Mysterious Jedi | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/7/2003 |
| Good story. Short songs are okay, but long songs might get obnoxious. Just be careful. Author Reply: Believe me when I say that I'm listening to all the warnings about long songs. There are people, though, who want the entire song in. I'll try to find a balance somewhere, but thanks for the advice! And sorry about the delay in responding to this. I'm trying to improve. | |
| Envinyatar | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/7/2003 |
| I have been awed by your work for a long time (it was the first fan-fiction I ever read), but in this chapter you seem to go beyond even your usual high standards. I wasn't sure you would find a place for humour in this grim situation, but the image of Aragorn about to fly at Erestor over the suggestion that Anduril will live with me for a long time! The pacing in this was excellent and the songs fit beautifully, but what impressed me most was Aragorn's vision. This was an extremely powerful piece of writing. Looking forward to more, and thanks for many hours of enjoyment. Author Reply: Thank you! Your compliments mean a lot to me (though you probably couldn't tell due to my complete lack of response until now). Sorry about that. I'm trying to improve. As for finding humor, I believe quite firmly that there is humor everywhere. You just have to look for it. Sometimes you have to look *hard* for it, but it's still there. And thanks for the comments about Aragorn's vision! I felt as though I was straying out on a limb with those, though I really couldn't tell you why. It was just a little out of the ordinary for me, so I'm very glad you liked them. Thanks again! | |
| fliewatuet | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/7/2003 |
| Wow, I am by no means disappointed by your version of the Warg attack! Reading about it alone was sufficient for a good rush of adrenaline. I now have to reread Tolkien's version, but I think your take was much darker and more intense. Merry's POV served well to convey the fear those beasts evoked, and by relating his sensation with what he felt during his encounter with the Black Riders in Bree made the entire situation even creepier. But there are other things I really enjoyed in this chapter (well enjoyed in a slightly morbid kind of way ...). Aragorn's dream was one of them, full of dark foreboding of the events to happen in Moria. The discussion among the Fellowship about the necessity to rest even with the Wargs closing in. Gandalf's musings about Gimli's reaction to Legolas' choice of songs. Author Reply: One of the things I wanted to do with the Wargs was to make their attack mean something. The attack didn't even make it into the movies, but it was the first time that the Fellowship had an actual battle. So I had to make it dark and scary, and to do that, I tried to do it from a hobbit perspective. Hobbits aren't going to be used to this kind of thing, which meant I could go a little darker than Tolkien. I'm glad you liked it! I wasn't sure how much I was stretching things with it. And sorry about the lack of response or updates. The update thing can be solved soon. The responses...well, I'm trying to do better! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/7/2003 |
| I like the use of song in this chapter. It was so important to Tolkien. This was a pretty tense chapter. The personalities of the companions come through in their reactions to the danger. Bormir, for instance, appears as the experienced, hardened warrior. Nice details about such matters as Aragorn making sure the Legolas knew his back was uncovered or Gandalf advising them not to retrieve the arrow. Author Reply: Sorry about the delayed response from my end! It is evil of me, I know. Sorry! Anyway, I'm glad you like the use of song. I wanted to test the waters with some shorter songs before I let Gimli sing, and the response is fairly positive, which relieves me. As for the details in the battle, I'm something of a stickler for things like that. Probably has something to do with my college degree. Sometimes it can be rather cumbersome, but it does come in handy during things like this. Thanks for the review! | |
| Ithilien | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/8/2003 |
| It is a night of catching up, and I only now realized I hadn't reviewed this. Or if I did, I can't seem to locate my review. In any case, it is hardly a bother to write a review to the sequel to one of my favorite-est fanfics of all time. I'm sure this one will be equally as wonderful. I can't imagine how it couldn't be. I see little has changed between Legolas and Gimli from when we last saw them. They are still...wary. That shouldn't surprise us, should it? The slights still exist in their minds, and apparently any grudging respect would just as soon be put aside. I wonder if a warg attack will change that at all. At least now the weary travelers have an idea about what Aragorn and Gandalf have been arguing about. Nice description of what was running through Legolas' mind when Moria was brought up. I wonder if he would have just hit the road right then and there had the decision been made on the spot. Maybe Moria will look better in the morning? In the meantime, poor Legolas must get over his apprehensions and prepare to fight off some beasts in the dark. I take it the next chapter will take place on January 12, (Night). Can't wait. Author Reply: Oh yes, good call. The next chapter is indeed January 12, 3019 (Night). Is my writing really that predictible? ;) As for Legolas and Gimli, that grudging respect is still there, but so is the animosity, and Moria is really only going to make it worse. For a bit. But in the end, a few events are going to lead to something that might almost be considered tolerance. But there's still the outbursts on the borders of Lothlorien to be considered, so no firm friendship can be established until *after* they pass into Lothlorien. | |
| Hai | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/24/2003 |
| This could be dangerous! and I hope you don't alter it too much so that someone gets hurt ;) You do a wonderful job staying with the books! I really appreciate taht! I'm looking forward to more and hope it isn't long in coming ;) Thank you for all you have written thus far! Author Reply: Hurt? Define "hurt." ;) Seriously, though, I'm so glad you appreciate my effort to stay with the books. I've gotten a lot of pressure to veer off and include things from the movie, but I just can't do that. For one, it feels like a cop-out and for another...I just love the books too much. So I'm very grateful that someone else approves of what I'm trying to do. Thank you for your review! | |