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| Fissures by Thundera Tiger | 14 Review(s) |
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| merimas gamgee | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/13/2006 |
| Well done, well written story. The thing about this story that both intrigued and impressed me was the fact that both Gimli and Otin make very valid points; you were able to present their arguement without taking sides, letting the reader judge for his/herself. Verry difficult thing to do, and my hat is off to you. Cheers!- Merimas PS- While I'm here, I might as well beg for more New Year's Eve. Please? Author Reply: Thank you very much! I'm glad you felt it was balanced, as that was part of the point. And also why this story wasn't told from Gimli's POV. It had to be told from an outside perspective because Gimli can't see the other side yet. He will, but right now it's too soon. And Otin is right. If Gimli continues (which he does) he'll be abandoning a lot of the things that dwarves consider important. Ultimately, he'll abandon Middle-earth. And there's both good and bad involved in that, so it's a matter of whether or not the price is worth the prize. Otin would probably say no. Gimli has a different view. In the end, as a writer I'm not qualified to make the call because they're coming from two very different backgrounds, which means the reader has to weigh in. Glad that came across. As for NYE...of all my WIPs, it's probably the one most likely to be updated. So hang on. I'll try. | |
| Noor | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/13/2006 |
| A wonderful tale of Gimli's feelings about all things elvish including Legolas. The descriptions were so well written1 Thank you! Noor PS - hope you will finish the story of Harad! Author Reply: Thank you! Glad you liked the descriptions. They were one of the few things I didn't struggle with, so it's good to know that I was right and they were on. As for Harad...working on it. It's near the top of the writing to-do list, so hopefully that helps... | |
| Frodo3791 | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/13/2006 |
| It's great to see another story from you again. It's been awhile. I think it's great that you can take the littlest things and make them into such a complex, fascinating, and character driven story. You flesh out Gimli so well... I liked the line comparing dwarves to rocks: "They weathered the world as the rocks did, and when they were worn into dust, they died." Interesting. -Micah Author Reply: I struggled with that line, actually, and I'm still not completely satisfied with it. I like the idea behind it, but not necessarily the line's execution. I'll have to think on it for later rewrites. But I'm glad you liked the story! Wasn't sure if I sell something as simple as a name as a starting point for the argument, but it seems to work in the end. Thanks for the review! | |
| docmon | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/13/2006 |
| Terrific, Thundera! This is a really interesting look into Gimli's interactions with his kin after the War and what troubles he might have had. And you're right - Otin would see this as a more destructive change, and one that Gimli, or their whole community, could not recover from. A fatal flaw, perhaps. Great dialogue b/w the two. I really liked the line when Otin was considering murder. And I really like the idea of a place such as Aglarond designed to mirror a tree. A unique contradiction that is a wonderful example of the friendship of the elf and dwarf and how it has affected, in this case, Gimli. Well done! Author Reply: Hey you! You know, if it really is "terrific" or "interesting," it's entirely your fault. You get all the credit for that. Looking back on the first draft...ugh. Yeah, it was very much without direction and without focus. So thanks for that! | |