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| A Little Nudge Out of the Door by Jocelyn | 56 Review(s) |
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| rgbj | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 12/22/2003 |
| Arranged marriages OH MY!! What are they thinking? The King has a sense of dread. This is the orc lady isn't it? The one Cand and Tathar were so afraid of? Well the King is smooth about it all. No wonder he is so overprotective. Legolas was the youngest of the competitors by quite a lot. The King must really be dragging his heels over losing him. Mithrandir gave good advice. Give the kid a little credit. He didn't knock, that is so not good. Still sees him as childlike. We can see why. He lost his mother to the nasty Balrog. That is a good tie in with the Mines of Moria. In the book he drops his arrow and is frozen with fright. Now we know why. Poor Queen. She was a good mother. Enter rumor full of painted tongue. In a social situation such as this gossip is almost as important as the food, not the drink of course. Poor lonely king. That is why he is so eager to keep Legolas a child. He is the last one and his queen is gone. The others have their own lives and the King will cling to this one as long as he can. Failure not desired but accepted and then move on but Legolas can't do that. The loss of his mother may have made him more self aware. Good parent despite his shortcomings. This from his children. Oh my a little rift in the lute here. Legolas is intimidated by his father? Well his father may be a very strong personality and be overwhelming. Is Legolas afraid of him for some reason? Well let's get on to the next chapter and start getting some answers for our questions. | |
| rgbj | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/22/2003 |
| Galadriel being able to tell the location of each competitor. Oh yeah so cool. The King with his white knuckles. He sure can look neutral even if he isn't. Another great description of the foot race. He just made it on the foot race. His nearest competitor was just slight seconds behind him. Of course as far as accuracy goes we know how well he does on that. No one can touch him. The dignitaries were on a platform just above The Novice Final Target? They must really trust their novices. King must be so proud. I thought the betting was so good. I read another story where betting was a large part of elven lives. Intense pride on the part of Mirkwood and the Royal family. The kid done good. So Legolas is now an elf lord fully of age. Even though he seems to be uncomfortable when he should be elated. OOH Dungeons. We know all about them. They are dark, scary and icky. At least the fractious four thought so. Legolas always hoped to do better. Oh dear an over-achiever on our hands here. So it is crowds that make him uneasy. He is a country/forest boy at heart not a city slicker used to crowds of elves. They drive him to distraction. Does he not feel that he fits in? Not looking either Silvan or Sindarin? Well at least his good friends can chide him about his station in life, his zealous pursuit of perfection and get away with it. Make him feel a little better also. Another chapter with great descriptions of the foot race, the aftermath, the betting and portraying Legolas' mixed feelings about his win. Thanks I know you must put a lot of thought into this. Oh that bed calling, calling, just for a moment.ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ | |
| rgbj | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 12/22/2003 |
| OK that was exciting. You did such a good job of the importance of focusing and what it feels like to be in a competitive situation. Lots of pressure on Legolas. I am sure they all feel pressure but his pressure seems to come from within, the need to strive for perfection. The what if's and nightmare scenarios. So true. That's what competitiveness is all about. You hate it and love it at the same time. King Thranduil's neutral expression but I bet he's busting his buttons inside. Legolas has a good attitude about taking things one step at a time and not borrow worry from the future events. Just do the best you can at the moment. I see the Istari is really getting into the spirit of things. He can use his powers to see who is doing a good job. OOP. OK so he's not perfect. His father thinks he is young and still has a lot to learn. If I remember he was the youngest of the four friends so that would be true. Wow those elven senses. To be aware of which horse is following you. Too cool. You did such a great job writing the obstacle course. Suspense and excitement. I could really put myself there by thinking of the Olympics. Thank you for an excellent chapter. | |
| rgbj | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/22/2003 |
| daw recommended that I join this site and review your story from here. I hadn't joined when I reviewed your first story of Legolas "Oh The Places We'll Go." That was a merry romp but this story is fated to be very different. I read this story all on one night when I had the flu. I know I liked it I just can't remember all of it. Actually I probably recall less than half. Too much cold medication. So I will be going through chapter by chapter, yes I am a glutton for Legolas pre-LOTR stories and reviewing. I feel it is only fair since you wrote it chapter by chapter. So here goes. Chapter the first I liked the idea of the elven Olympics. Of course with their life spans every century made sense to me. The idea that the art of war took a long time to learn and become proficient in was a very interesting idea. One that I approve of since again they live such a long time. AH The fractious four are together. I am glad to see them still so close. And Tathar giving Legolas a hard time. That is his job in life. So Legolas has led a sheltered over-protected life. He was well trained, and educated but not well traveled. He's a broody little elf striving for perfection. Good you got the main Imladris and 'Lorien elves as referees and the rest in the audience. Oh good our favorite Istari has shown up and Galadriel and Celeborn. Everyone's here so the party begins. I liked it when the competitors got introduced just like at the Olympics. So inventive. Siblings are nice to have sometimes. I bet they give him a hard time usually. So timid and inhibited; that is a huge change from when he was an elfling. OK so now we get the competition. Onwards and forwards. | |
| Amy | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue on 12/20/2003 |
| I really liked it. I love long story's like this one. How long did it take you to write it? Write more please. | |
| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: Epilogue on 12/10/2003 |
| i really love this story! im sorry that i came across it just now, for this story has made me want to laugh and cry. and i say again, i LOVE this story! | |