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|To See A World by Nightwing||772 Review(s)|
|LKK||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/23/2003|
|Wow. You did it again, Nightwing. Another lovely chapter -- in a painful, tear at your soul, sort of way. I like the way you intermingle humor and pathos. |
Poor Legolas, struggling to reach consciousness, deciding that the first thing he's going to do when he can get up is clean his teeth. (Having spent much time in a sickbed myself, I can identify with the sentiment!) Legolas lying there imagining what Aragorn is doing from the sounds in the room was a nice touch too.
Then the hints of pathos creep in as Legolas assumes he is always waking up at night because his sleep cycle has been disturbed. The spark of fear lights, fanned into an inferno by later confirmation. The elf is blind. Legolas' unreasoning but understandable panic, Aragorn's attempt to use his healer's training to calm himself and his patient --- you handled their reactions well, I think. Some might chide you for Legolas' reaction. I won't. Given that's he's been deathly ill for 2 weeks, feeling that he's finally out of danger, then suddenly discovering he's blind, I think Legolas' panicked reaction is fully justified.
And as for Legolas and the cat ..... I have one word: purrrrfect.
(Sorry, I couldn't resist. LOL)
By the way, you wrote some of the funniest reviewer responses I've ever read. The red-haired witch will work just fine, thank you. Is she going to try and eat the elf and ranger like in Hansel and Gretel?
|Avon||Reviewed Chapter: 6 on 9/23/2003|
|Sorry, I don't have anything terribly useful to say - just that I'm reading it and enjoying it. I figure even mundane feedback is better than no feedback. It's rare - IMO - to find an angsty h/c story which isn't over the top but you seem to be managing it rather well. BTW I also totally agree with you about Legolas's age and the reasons why.|
|Ithilien||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/18/2003|
|Well, I think I know what murky waters Lisette may have saved you from, but I see know evidence of murk anywhere near here. So I'll just keep paddling along. No need to run for the hills.|
I see we are settling in for the angst factor in this story, and I am ready to get all comfy here. Another hot button for me you know -- angst. I eat it for breakfast. Well, maybe not, but I could. (Cold, with a little brown sugar sprinkled on top...yummy! But I digress...)
What is with this cabin and provisions and horse and food? Wow, you really have my head spinning over who could be doing this for them. Certainly, this event was an accident. Wasn't it? I mean, everything feels comfortable and good (at least THIS part of the story does), but that no one has come back to claim anything just seems *odd*. I'm getting vibes, and I don't want to, but all of this feels eerie, sort of. But not. Friendly, kind of. Like Hansel and Gretel before the witch popped out and tried to shove them into an oven. I mean...uh, I shouldn't be worried, should I?
Poor Legolas! I'm so glad to see he is showing signs of improvement, but boy, these are babysteps. The elf is a long ways off from anything nearing a recovery. Yet, they've fallen into a routine, and that is a good sign as it means Legolas has stabilized.
What is Legolas wanting to tell Aragorn that he can't do in a conscious state? The curiosity is killing me.
Gosh, I love the backstory here, especially the little details about the Mirkwood elves. I love how you describe them in comparison to the other realms. Very fitting. And I loved the little fight between Legolas and his brother. All over where to hang the banners? Um, these elves are a bit hot-headed, aren't they? I love it.
Legolas' mother is a very special elf, isn't she? She seems not to hold prejudice, and is calm, even and eloquent. How lovely. She also seems to possess a modicum of foresight. Too bad she can't use it to prevent what is about to happen.
Oh, this is so very sad. And knowing how these elves might act over hanging a banner, I can only imagine how they might react to losing a queen. Gosh, the only thing that surprises me is that Legolas is capable, after four years, of doing anything but crying into his pillow. But that would be a bit extreme, even for these elves probably.
More soon, Nightwing. Such a lovely job you are doing. More. Please.
|LKK||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/12/2003|
|I should have posted reviews on the previous chapters. I apologize. This story has been very emotional, quite gripping. The little cottage in the woods sounds too good to be true. I worry about what's going to happen when the "owner" returns. It's almost as if the two have stumbled across a fairy tale cottage. I keep expecting the wicked witch to come home any minute.|
From a writing standpoint, I like how you're integrating the flashbacks with the current timeline. The transitions are very smooth and flow well. And your characterizations are wonderful.
Looking forward to more!
|Mirari||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/11/2003|
|An intriguing piece of work. This comfortable little house seems a tad eerie to me, and I can't help but wonder if Aragorn and Legolas are as safe there as the Ranger seems to presume they are. Hmm... |
You've definitely taken and held my interest! The characterization is bang-on for Legolas, and though Aragorn seems less experienced and more unsure than usual I am attributing that to his young age.
Wonderful job, and you can be sure I'll be back for more. ^^
|Alisha B||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/11/2003|
|Well, I've been following your story on ff.net, and I'm slowly making the transition here. You write the characters very well. Aragorn is a bit off, but he's also a lot younger then the books. Legolas, however, is right on. You've given him the perfect combination of eloquence and nobility. So far, he sound every bit of 3,000 years. (or so.) Congratulations on that. Generally, I've found that many authors make him sound too young and informal. But like I said, I'll be keeping an eye out for more updates, because I really can't imagine where you're going with it. But I'm sure it'll be great! Keep up the good work!|
|daw the minstrel||Reviewed Chapter: 5 on 9/10/2003|
|The flashback to the death of Legolas's mother was very well done. I liked the whole set up of famly relationships between the brothers and parents. And the picture of Mirkwood elves as "wild" was wonderful. Now I am wondering about whoever is leaving gifts.|
|Ithilien||Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/8/2003|
|Donít fret. I am here, loving this story to pieces, even if I do have trouble sometimes getting to the reviews page. But I also know those reviews are important food for the growing author, so I brought along my famous ďAuthor PraisesĒ stew to warm your soul. Maybe we should dish out some for Aragorn too. He seems to be suffering a bit and could use a little something to cheer him on. Of course, once he wakes up to find Legolas holding his hand, he might feel a little better. |
Your prose is marvelous, and I am enjoying the poetry of your words as much as I am the torment of this story. Somehow Legolas will live, wonít he? Has a cure been found? Oh joy! But you wonít make it so easy for us, will you? Iím betting not. You keep mentioning Legolasí eyes, and it seemed like their were moments when he couldnít see before, so I expect the easing of this suffering will be only small. Something to rich up the stew?
The moments trapped in memory, are lovely and sad. The Elfís love for his mother is vividly clear. How lonely our little Legolas must have been without companions. I love the little telling moments when his mother shares her secrets with him. It is a beautiful little tale, this back material, and Iím hoping there will be more of it before we are done, and Iím wondering what it will add to the story as it unfolds.
Wonderful job, but ah, look, the stew is all gone. Devoured, and just that quickly. Tell you whatÖ put another chapter out, and Iíll make up another batch. Bigger this time. Yum!
|Elvenesse||Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/3/2003|
|Just to let you know that I'm reading this story and enjoying it. Writing that last chapter in one go is impressive! Hope that you update soon.|
|Lady Jaina||Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/3/2003|
|Very good job, I am enjoying. I sympathize with your CPR problem, I used it in my fics as well, it just seems to modern, but I do hate to use magic to make them breath! Great job!|