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| Interrupted Journeys 8: Through Shadow and Flame by elliska | 39 Review(s) |
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| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/19/2012 |
| This was moving, worrisome and hilarious in all the good places, elliska. From what Galithil might be thinking, being back in his adar's village, to the shrewd, amused she-dwarf knowing all about Thranduil's temper to the increasing worry, Amglaur's new responsibilities and of course, the dark shadow of this she-elf who keeps changing name but not ways, this is shaping up to be a quite dark story in very troubled times. I'm having a great time! Author Reply: Excellent! That is exactly what I was going for! I couldn't resist the dwarf being female. And I love this: this she-elf who keeps changing name but not ways. That describes her very nicely. It is actually a pretty dark story in the end. I'm glad you are enjoying it. And thanks so much for the reviews! I really appreciate them! | |
| Fantasia | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/18/2012 |
| Moralfien is not that Noldo that try to kiss Thranduil and lead a revolt? I have to re read now the old stories. They are always conspiring, Dannenion and Dolwon, I still don't see why the King did not exile them. And a new mystery to me, why Lord Amglaur is not the King of Lothlorien? Lord Celeborn is the Lord, as far we know (hopefull, Lord Amglaur will survive!). And I wish that Nis had shared her tale with Elrond and Glorfindel, the last one could has recognized Durin's bane Now, the best part is the cousins reactions to a bearded female and how not to insult a beard! priceless. The maturity of those two is incredible, they are thinking as proper princes now. Author Reply: Moralfien is indeed that Noldo. She along with Dannenion and Dolwon are trouble, no doubt about that. We will be solving your mystery of Amglaur fast enough. Not the next chapter, but the one after that ought to clear it up. I always wondered why there was such mystery around what was in Moria at the time of the Ring War. Dwarves obviously escaped. They surely must have told someone why they left. And you'd think if the descriptions got back to Glorfindel (or really any Elf alive in the First Age, since Balrogs took part in the War of Wrath), they'd figure out what it was in there. Of course, maybe they knew but hoped it had moved on since it never reappeared (as far as they knew) after this. But I'm enjoying playing with what Legolas knew. He did vote against going through Moria when the Fellowship voted, but he did not say why. He did seem to know how grim the situation was when the Balrog was identified. And he did know quite a bit about Nimrodel, for example. I absolutely could not resist the bearded female dwarf. Someone put that into my head in another part of this story (that Legolas should meet a female dwarf) and I decided this would be a fun way to do it. It will put him on his toes every other time he meets a dwarf! :-) I'm glad you think Legolas and Galithil come across as mature. That is exactly what I am going for. Thanks so much for the reviews! I appreciate them so much! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/18/2012 |
| I was reading along, looking ahead to enough problems created by the dwarf's story of the Balrog, and then you hit me with Moralfien, Dannenion, and Dolwon. Why does that sound even worse? LOL Interesting to see Galithil's old playmate well-armed and serving as a guard. That certainly suggests something odd is going on. I know Thranduil needs Dolgailon, but his absence seems to have left room for problems here. Of course Galithil and Legolas are both functioning in pretty adult roles too, and they're handling them well. Their experience in Thranduil's court comes in handy when they sit with Amglaur to hear what's going on in Lothlorien. Really, you have to ask yourself what Amroth was thinking. Did you plan the theme of absent ruler = problem? Or am I making that up? The stuff about the maggots was disgusting. Accurate, I have no doubt, but disgusting. I'm with Legolas on that one. But he and Galithil shine with the kindness of their conversation. No wonder the short-bearded "child" was willing to speak to them. :-) I liked the connection to your previous story where the kids eavesdropped. If he is a child...and maybe one of those injured dwarves is his father...and neither of them appears to be his mother...." Galithil shook his head and practically flinched away from looking at the dwarves, obviously sharing the pain of the young dwarf that had likely lost one parent and might still lose the other. I really liked that little snip of conversation for the way it gives the reader just information to figure out "dead mother?" and "Galithil thinking of his own parents." There's always little flash of pleasure at figuring these tiny things out as a reader. Author Reply: Moralfien is going to be more trouble than the Balrog for at least a few people before this story is over, but even knowing that, that comment made me giggle. :-) I did intend to play around a bit here with the idea of absent rulers and the problems that causes--you are not making it up! Everything that happens in this story, especially the oddness we see in this village, is really set up for not the next story, but the one after that. It is all motivation for some of Galithil's future decisions, which cause their own problems. :-) But this seemed like a good place to do it, paralleling Amroth's actions with stuff going on in the Woodland Realm. :-) Legolas and Galithil are being very adult here. Thranduil will be proud of them on several occasions. And they may learn some things about adulthood too. I couldn't resist the maggots. They are actually used in modern, 1st world medicine for severe burns in some hospitals (properly raised, sterile ones, of course). It really does work. But it is so disgusting. I just couldn't resist having Legolas have my reaction to first learning about that. :-) And I'm glad you liked that bit of conversation. It was almost cut (a lot of that conversation was cut and added back and cut again as I tried to find a balance between slowing things down too much and showing Legolas and Galithil's concern for the dwarves), but I liked that it showed Galithil is still sensitive to that topic, so it stayed. Thanks so much for the reviews, Daw. I appreciate them so much! | |
| CandissD | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/17/2012 |
| Another great chapter! I loved how Legolas deduced Nis was a child only to find out she was a lady dwarf and that he had insulted her beard. :D My favorite line of the whole chapter :" When your adar hears it...well, I think that to say he is going to react very badly would be a rampaging understatement." haha I can't wait to see how he reacts and cannot wait to read more :) Author Reply: I couldn't resist the lady dwarf thing. Someone a while back put it in my head and it made me giggle. :-) I'm glad you enjoyed it. And, that line about Thranduil. I bet Galithil is right about that. It is fun to picture Thranduil's reaction to something this potentially serious. I hope you enjoy it. Thanks so much for the reviews. I appreciate them so much! | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/15/2012 |
| I'm really delighted to see you (and all these characters!) back again :-) Though I had goosebumps right from the start. I loved the way you contrasted the tension of Dolgailon's activities and the news Thranduil has to give Amglaur with the wild, carefree, very woodelfy fun of the horse race. I'm looking forward to seeing your version of events around this time. And whoa, it's strange seeing Galithil determined to be so responsible! Galithil might manage to kill an orc or two before he was killed himself if he found himself in a position where he was forced to defend himself unaided. Oh. Well. That's ok then. Author Reply: I am so glad you noticed and enjoyed that contrast--that is exactly what I was going for! You made my day! And Galithil is going to be very much the young adult in this one (mostly). ;-) Oh. Well. That's ok then. LOL! I am glad to be back and posting! I so thrilled people are stilling willing to read! Thanks so much for the review! I really appreciate them! | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/12/2012 |
| I was do glad to see a new installment! And what a moment in time! But you are evil, warning in advance of OC's death! :/ THe tension in the opening scene was very well done. THat they`re almost caught by an orc relieving itself was hilarious and stressful at the same time! I was happy to see Dolgailon back, but now IŽll keep myself on my toes for the whole story till we learn who dies. Sniff. Great chapter, elliska, please keep them coming! :-) Author Reply: Yes, there is lots to work with in this point in ME history, all of it right near Mirkwood, so it will cause them all sorts of trouble. :-) I had fun with the opening scene. I was quite pleased with it when I was done with it. ;-) Poor Dolgailon. He gets a lot of grief in these stories. But you are evil, warning in advance of OC's death! LOL! Normally I wouldn't because it gives away a good deal, but when Aradunnon died a few stories back, I didn't have a warning and the surprise hurt someone who had just lost someone in real life. I wouldn't risk doing that to someone again. I felt bad. So, I remembered the warning this time. And if it makes people wonder who it will be, I am happy with that (yes, I am very mean). :-) I hope you enjoy! | |
| CandissD | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2012 |
| wonderful beginning - glad to have another installment and can't wait to read what happens :) Author Reply: I'm so glad you are still reading and that you enjoyed the first chapter! :-) I hope you continue to enjoy. Thanks so much for the review! | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2012 |
| I'm impressed that Dolgailon's first action when he got back to the crypt was to report on what they'd found. Mine would have been to WASH MY HANDS, FOR ERU'S SAKE! Ack, ack, ack! I suppose that's why Dolgailon is a warrior and I'm not. Though I notice he's still plenty wary of Thranduil's opinion of what orders he might choose to give. Smart guy. OTOH, Legolas seems less worried, or rather not worried enough, I guess. Not only racing through the woods, but doing it on Thranduil's horse with wagers all around. LOLOL. So I saw that "OC death" warning and was cringing for Dolgailon and thinking surely not. Surely she means one of the red shirts. And then Galithil pipes up and volunteers to go talk to the dwarves. OMG. These two have recently lost their parents. So really. It's a red shirt, right? Galithil might manage to kill an orc or two before he was killed himself Wow, Tulus! Don't get all carried away in your endorsement! What do you say when your wife asks if this outfit makes her look fat? Author Reply: ROTFL! I like to assume that somewhere between Dol Guldur and their camp they ran into a relatively clean stream! I had fun making it be Thranduil's horse that Legolas had...borrowed. I couldn't resist doing that. I can definitely see Amglaur persuading him to take that particular horse from the barn. :-) What do you say when your wife asks if this outfit makes her look fat? ROTFL!! You will notice that Tulus's wife faded and is in the Undying Lands now. Maybe this is why. ;-) It's a red shirt, right? Nope. Well, yes, four of them. But not just them. Obviously not giving that away though. :-) | |
| Fantasia | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/10/2012 |
| What a good news, you are writing again! I have missed the whole gang and i'm already worry. And Dolgailon is in there, did I ever tell you that he is my favorite character from your stories? Thanks Elliska. Author Reply: I'm so glad you are still reading! I hope you enjoy this installment. Dolgailon has a fairly good role in this one, so hopefully you will. I like him too. He is a good guy. :-) | |