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The Tide of Times  by daw the minstrel 19 Review(s)
Tapetum LucidumReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
A forest fire! I never thought of that... I guess that's why I'm not an author.

Ithilden is bearing the weight of this responsibility well. It is a hard choice for anyone, much less when your family is involved. I like how you set up the situation so he had to consult with his advisors and send messengers everywhere. It was very presidential. I also liked how they had to juggle their limited resources rather than suddenly have hundreds of elves available. Your plan for Legolas' and Annael's future is excellent. I think I know why Ithilden expects Eilian to show up at that settlement. And her name is not Legolas.

I think your fire break plan is a good one. I've never been in a forest fire either. "Perhaps there were worse things than standing on his hands in a field in the pale spring sunshine." That was a great line. Things can always get worse. Asking the trees to forgive him was very sweet. Luckily, Greenwood is not Fanghorn.

It was very political of the youngest to think of the dedication of the colony of elves. He knew his father was unhappy with them but still thought they were admirable. I doubt the other novices thought the same way. One of your many "royal" touches. I am always glad that he and Eilian are enthusiastic about seeing one another. He is getting a bit old to be "brat." Of course, my sister still calls our 30 year old brother "baby."

His little accident was very unexpected. Eilian's reaction was wonderful. I could feel his heart in his throat. Unfortunately, duty calls. It would be hard for me to leave an injured loved one and go back to work. Concentrating would be nearly impossible. He is very brave.



NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
I love how this came out. It flows well, the whole firefighting thing is an adventure to Legolas, and then he sees the hardwork and the danger. The blistered hands and the stag are wonderful details, and the accident with Legolas is just the kind of thing that can happen in such a situation. Poor Annael and Eilian! Both want to help him and yet their duty demands they stay at their posts!

I hope the elves of the settlement gain some understanding at how difficult and costly to the realm it can be to try to protect them so far out from the rest of the people.

ArbelethielReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003

Gah! I again missed reviewing a chapter. I must review immediately after I’ve read it, because I forget otherwise.

About Legolas and the Southern Patrol, isn’t he in command of the Home Patrol in A Question of Duty? I remember it because I thought it fitted in nicely with Maldor’s analysis of the three brothers’ characters.

Poor Ithilien :( He is plagued with problems already, and now this fire. Plus felling trees must feel like murder to wood-elves.

Nasty cliffhanger. We know that it won’t kill him, but I dearly hope, for everybody involved, that Legolas is on his two feet again when Thranduil comes back, or heads will roll ;)

Thank you for this chapter(s),

~Arbelethiel


The KarenatorReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
Daw,
What an exciting chapter. The forest fire was well done. Even though I don't know much about fire fighting, it seemed very real and believable. I had to chuckle as Ithilden thought about Eilian getting his way to guard the settlement. Ah..the fair Celuwen.....
One of the more interesting points you made was about Ithilden's decision regarding where to post Annael and Legolas. Quite frankly, I had not considered the fact that posting Annael to the Home Guard would place him directly under his own adar's command. Excellent point and one that I should have known Ithilden would not miss. He has too much experience in what to do with his own family members.
I, also, got a laugh out Pilin's reluctance to do such..well...menial work. He's been in the king's stables too long.
This was one of my favorite lines..."He stood for a moment, feeling the weight of obligations that sometimes left so little room for personal choices that he felt as if his life had all been given away." Oh my...that really took me aback. It is not an easy place to be the king's son or to hold the position of command that Eilian does. Legolas is just starting to feel the true weight of what his brothers have known for so long. My heart broke for the big brother as he watched his baby brother taken away from him. During the rescue efforts, it was all Eilian could do to not plunge dangerously ahead to reach Legolas, so letting him go must have been a real test of his strength and sense of duty. Poor Eilian....I'm available for any therapy you may feel he needs....
I hope you won't be too long in updating. I hate having to check the computer every thirty minutes for weeks to find out how our youngest prince is faring! :<) Very good, Daw, as usual. Karen

JustMeReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
The events of this chapter just prove that you should be careful what you wish for, 'cause you might get more than you bargained for. Legolas wanted excitement and adventure - and he was initially pleased at being able to "get out" of his training. But it ended up being just a little more "excitement" than he might have wanted. Poor Annael feels responsible for the injury to his friend, but sometimes these unexpected things happen and no one is really to blame. I'm sure that Legolas would knock him upside the head if he knew his friend was feeling guilty. Of course it is always good to have Eilian on the scene. His concern for the "brat" is heartwarming, and I'm sure Legolas will be glad for his presence when he comes to. I hope that this injury does not infringe on the time Eilian has to spend with Celuwen (forgive me if I have butchered the spelling of her name), as I assume it is her settlement that is threatened by the fire. It is a good thing that Thranduil is not around right now as he would probably wear the carpet thin worrying over Legolas - and in this case, with good reason!
Ithilden does not have an easy task ahead of him. Trying to assign warriors to the proper patrols while keeping in mind their experience and family matters as well is a rather daunting task. But I believe that he is the best man (oops! I mean elf) for the job. I just wonder how he will handle it when it is his own son he has to assign to patrol. Hmmm...food for thought!

MollyReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
I have always been a big fan of hurt/comfort, and the hurt was very good--Eilian and Annael are obviously worried, which was sweet. I'm eager to see what form the comfort will take!

meckinockReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
Wow -this chapter has everything - a window on the mind of a military commander as he analyzes the battlefield and plans his strategy (to include considerations of personalities and relationships); a forest fire AND orcs (I haven't lived in a fire zone either but you would have had me believing you had if you hadn't confessed); young'uns in peril...It was touching to see Eilian's brotherly concern for injured Legolas and how he was forced by duty to leave his care to others. What torture for Elves to have to chop trees down to save the forest - listening to their cries of pain - yikes! It must be like shooting Bambi for them. Gotta go shake off a case of quivering paralysis now...

Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
Daw, this is another wonderful chapter. When I read about the fire, I admit I thought about the fires in California, but I know that some parts of a story are planned far in advance, and events sometimes catch up. The strain of fighting a fire is very well written, and I kept thinking that *something* was going to happen - but it was still a shock when it did!

I do hope that Legolas will be all right (well, I know he will be) and that no one else is hurt!

Jay

nanethReviewed Chapter: 5 on 11/2/2003
Wow, what a great chapter! I've already read it three times, just enjoying the richness of the images you conjured. Really, really well done!

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