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| The Wars of the Valar by Fiondil | 17 Review(s) |
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| Nieriel Raina | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| Oh, this chapter was just simply beautiful, Fiondil! Well done! Author Reply: Thanks, NiRi. I'm glad you liked this chapter. | |
| Edlyn | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| I just realised that part of a sentence in my review got cut off for some reason. Here's what I meant to have typed: Hmmm, I wonder if the reason that the fëa acts as if he was still in hröa is because eventually he will go back to having a hröa when he is Reborn. I think it would be even more difficult to adapt to a body again if one didn't have the "physical" memories of what it was like. Not to mention that right after an elf dies the shock alone would want him to hold onto something familiar amidst all the fear and strangeness. Also, I had the impression that this particular fëa was a child or at most an adolescent. Am I right? I know that Námo is taller and larger than any of the Erunini but from the description it seemed that this Child wasn't fully grown. The fact that he was calling for his mama just reinforces my impression. I think that is it, meldonya. I really hate it when I get interrupted while typing, I end up making mistakes or forgetting to finish what I start... Edlyn Author Reply: That's all right. I figured it was something like that. *grin* I suspect that the fëa acted as if he was still in hröa was because it probably had not sunk in (and probably never would) that it was dead and no longer in hröa. Your supposition that the Child was indeed a child, most likely an adolescent, is correct. Unfortunately, I suspect that not a few elflings wandered off when they shouldn't have, which would make what Melkor did or attempted to do to them even more heinous. | |
| Edlyn | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| Oh, meldonya, was this as hard to write as it was to read? My heart was breaking as I realised what had happened both for that lost Child and for Námo. I can understand why Atar did (with hindsight, of course I can do that), however, when one doesn't understand and doesn't have all the information that we readers do the not knowing is difficult to deal with whether one is an Ayanumuz, an Eruhin or whatever else. I had wondered when the little gardens were going to appear and who made them. It hadn't occurred to me that the Máyar had built them. So now I'm wondering which one of them had a hand in building the garden that Glorfindel recovered in. I suspect that Námo's upset and feelings of betrayal aren't entirely dealt with, despite Atar's words and love. I find myself wondering if a part of his mind is wondering whether Atar allowed him to be captured and hurt so badly, just so he'd have this understanding for what the fëar of the Firstborn have gone through. Hmmm, I wonder if the reason that the fëar acts as if it was still in *In My own Time, Námo,* Atar replied. *All things must come to fruition in their own time and Mine.* This is something I know I have to remember but it's so hard to be patient! I am glad that Námo has his faithful Máyar to aid him and very, very glad that he has Vairë. This is hard enough with their support and love. I would hate to think about having to deal with it on his own. Beautifully written, as always, meldonya. I so appreciate the work you put into each chapter and the depth of thought and feeling as well. Eru bless and keep thee. [Proofreader on duty--I think you may have a missing word or two in this sentence as it reads rather awkwardly: He was not sure what was happening, only that a great need to call out what he instinctively knew was a Word of Power in a language he did not know but realized that his actions were a summons. I'd rewrite it this way: He was not sure what was happening, only that he had a great need to call out what he instinctively knew was a Word of Power in a language he did not know. Even so, he realized that his actions were a summons.] Edlyn P.S. Now I am being pestered by a plot bunny about the first of the fëar waking up and exploring the Halls for the first time... Author Reply: Hi, Edlyn. Thanks for the suggestion on improving the sentence. I did indeed inadvertantly left out a couple of words without realizing it. I'm sure Námo might have wondered if Atar allowed what happened to him for this very reason, but I think in the end he would realize that Atar didn't so much allow it in that sense but simply because he would not interfere with Námo's free will actions. Instead, he took advantage of the situation to further his own designs and to prepare Námo for his future role. And yes, it was indeed a very hard chapter to write. | |
| Radbooks | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| *sob* That was incredibly sad. What a horrible way for Namo to discover the arrival of the Children. It makes perfect sense since we know Melkor found them first and he had to have killed some, but still... I love the image of Namo sensing that name within himself and calling the fea to him and then learning how to speak to the child. That was all very well done and wonderful to read even as I was teary eyed through it all. I just love Namo and Vaire's Mayar - their loyalty and love is wonderful to see. Author Reply: Hi Radbooks. Yes, it was sad and rather a shock for Námo and his Máyar. I'm glad you liked how I handled the entire chapter. It was not easy to write but it was a necessary piece of the story. | |
| 6336 | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| Oh, that was beautiful, very sweet and loving. Poor Namo, poor fea! So now it begins, now he knows why he built the Halls so big. More please, Lynda Author Reply: Thanks, Lynda. I'm glad you liked this chapter. And now he does indeed know why he built the Halls as he did. | |
| Beruthiels Cat | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| This is the chapter I've been hoping for for a long time...I knew it would be powerful, and it certainly is. Poor Námo, to finally realize the great purpose for which he spent such time building his Halls. So bittersweet, and so very much a part of why he is, beyond doubt, my favorite Vala. I just love his reaction to the Elven fëa, and his conversation with Atar...so many times he has been placed in the position of having to take things on trust, more than all the other Valar put together. 'Well done' just doesn't seem to be enough to say for such a chapter, but well done it is...and then some. Author Reply: Thanks, Cat, for your review. This was a very hard chapter to write, and in fact, I actually debated as to whether I should write it at all, but knew that there was no hope of not writing it. Yes, Námo has been forced to having to take things on trust, more so than the other Valar, although I think Manwë comes a close second on that score. | |
| Kaylee | Reviewed Chapter: 49 on 12/19/2008 |
| Oh, meldonya!! *sobs* The poor little one...and to know that Melkor has found them...oh...*shudders* Namo will take good care of him, I know. Ai...and such a secret to hide from Manwe. But at least Vaire will know. And I suppose what Atar said to Namo is akin to what He told Ulmo before*...that not all things are in Manwe's purview to know and he will recognize that, and leave some things as a trust between Atar and his brothers? ~Kaylee! *P.S....Before, being of course, the little chat Atar had with Ulmo about being his secret voice. :) Though that was in Tapestry, not here. Author Reply: I knew you were speaking about the Tapestry fic with Ulmo. *grin* I suspect that you are correct about Atar's words to Námo being similar with regards to Manwë. | |