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| Fiondil's Tapestry by Fiondil | 14 Review(s) |
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| Petra | Reviewed Chapter: 61 on 4/24/2009 |
| I find the idea behind this, the exchange of letters between Aragorn and his family, to be an interesting one. The description of the guard captain in Gondor was well-done. I found it awkward, though. You shift from a first person POV to third between the first section and the last. The transition between the two segments seemed rather abrupt to me. Additionally, in the second section, you seem to switch rather abruptly from Gilraen's POV to Elrond's. That section would have read more smoothly for me had you stuck with one character's POV. The conclusion also felt abrupt to me, almost as if you weren't certain how to end the story and so you just picked an arbitrary stopping point. This might have benefitted from having someone else look over it for you before you posted it publicly. Author Reply: Well Petra, you seem not to realize that the first section is Aragorn's letter, which Gilraen is reading out loud to the others. I think this is clear from the fact that in the second section it begins with Gilraen quoting further from the letter. I do not see where I switch POVs in the second section unless you object to Elrond saying anything. Nor am I'm sure what you think I should have done with the ending: show them all writing letters? Why? That's obviously what they were going to do. The end result was, not only were those people in the study writing letters, but when word got around, everyone else in Imladris stopped what they were doing to write a letter to Aragorn and Gilhael. That I actually have to spell this out to anyone seems rather odd and to my mind shows a lack of perception. And as it happens I have a beta and a very good one. You presume much on little or no information. May I respectfully suggest that since you obviously don't like my writing, and can't do anything but find fault in it, you should go and find something to read that's more to your liking. | |
| Cairistiona | Reviewed Chapter: 61 on 4/24/2009 |
| Wonderful glimpse of the warm regard those in Rivendell hold for Estel, and of the war-scarred Gondorian captain. He seems an encapsulation of all the hardships of living in the shadow of Mordor. I really enjoyed this. Author Reply: Thanks Cairistiona. I'm glad you enjoyed this little glimpse of Estel's family and his adventures in Minas Tirith. Thanks for letting me know. | |
| shirebound | Reviewed Chapter: 61 on 4/24/2009 |
| It's heartwarming to think of all these people loving and missing Estel. And Erestor calling him "our youngest", awwww. Author Reply: Hi, Shirebound. Yes, it is heartwarming. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I really appreciate it. | |
| Sunny | Reviewed Chapter: 61 on 4/24/2009 |
| So the twins have taken up new jobs as mailmen. Hopefully they will be able to find Aragorn, and deliver that mail. And hopefully Aragorn will also answer those letters. Though considering the number of letters he is going to receive, that may take some time. ;-) Author Reply: I think they would prefer the title 'courier'; it sounds more regal. *lol* I'm sure Aragorn will write a 'share with everyone in Imladris' letter rather than respond to each one individually, saving that for the letters from his immediate 'family'. | |