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|Or Perchance, When the Last Little Star by Larner||17 Review(s)|
|Elentarri||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/23/2018|
|Hello. Please finish this story. It's simply too good to be languishing unfinshed like this.|
|Celeritas||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/14/2009|
|Oh, dear, Endore is one of those mothers...|
Well, I'm glad to know Lynesse has a sharp wit and quite a bit of spirit, and it looks fairly clear that she and Hurin are well-matched...
Author Reply: Oh, yes--one of those mothers for certain.
I find I quite like Lynesse myself. She and Hurin will have a long and, I believe, a happy marriage in the end.
Thanks so for all the feedback!
|Sunny||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/5/2009|
|My first impression here was, corsets in Middle Earth? And then to start to mutter about the author unfairly giving corsets a bad reputation.|
Om closer reading, there was no mention of corsets, but with that lacing scene, that gown really needs as much boning as any corset (well, if you have no corset, and no boning in the dress, the laced area is going to end up as an unsightly bunched up area around the waist – that being the narrowest part of the torso. And from the description in the story, _that_ was not the result) And speaking as someone who has used actual, genuine, spring-steel boned corsets on occasion – a corset is not actually uncomfortable to wear! _Provided_ the thing is properly fitted, and the wearer is able to get used to wearing it (this includes a “not being laced too tightly” part. Or at least “gets uses to being laced up”.)
As for Lynessë, her mother evidently has no idea of the proper fitting and wearing of corsets. So the poor girl ends up spending the evening feeling like a chicken trussed up for Sunday dinner.
And with that creep Tervain hanging around, I think that is an all too accurate description of her situation.
I actually expect to see more of Tervain. He really makes a proper villain, and quite in keeping with the Heyeresque flavour to this first chapter of the story, too. And I suppose you will arrange a quite proper Bad End for him, too. Seems he is the sort who deserves it – several times over!
The Social Climber mother – I suppose she will also learn a few lessons? She has had the opportunity for _one_ lesson, at least, since Lynessë told her that she had danced with Faramir. And that was _only_ because she had kept company with Húrin all evening, and he therefore perceived her as not being part of the school of husband-hunting pirhanas that had surrounded him all evening.
If Húrin is going to be a bit shy due to his disability, perhaps she will actually support the Creep despite his unsavory reputation? Then again, I suppose she may simply be gullible at an opportune time. It shall be interesting to see.
Author Reply: I must assume the dress was indeed boned.
And now I'm being compared with Georgette Heyer, am I? Oh, dear--it's been quite a time since I read one of her books, which were favorited of my college roommate. Perhaps I might suggest to her she look at this story, then!
Oh, Tervain's fate is being properly sealed as we speak--as you will see hints of as you read the new chapter. And love your description of Lynesse being like a chicken trussed for Sunday dinner, and Tervain as the possible diner!
Thanks so very much! Your comments have given me some nice giggles!
|Kitty||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/4/2009|
|Now that the holidays are over, I finally find time to read and review this - sorry for being so late!|
Lynessë's mother would drive me crazy, frankly. If I despise something then it is being dressed up to make an impression on someone I don't care for. And her opinions and hopes left me in absolute sympathy with Lynessë. Her comment about the prize cow left me snickering. How true!
That feast was fun. How nice of Húrin to realise what Tervain was about and to come to Lynessë's rescue! And I was so glad she was able to see him for the great man he is and forgot about his arm. I had forgotten the name of Húrin's wife, but now I know where this is leading, and look forward to more of this romance!
Author Reply: And now the holidays are over, I have a chance to do some editing, adding, and responding to this one!
Endore would drive me crazy, too. My grandmother was this sort of person, you see, and she drove us all nuts!
And, yes--this is about that romance. I'd originally started this as quite a different story, but have managed to split that story into two much longer and more detailed ones. Although I might end it as I'd intended to begin the others.
Anyway, thanks so for the comments, Kitty!
|Linda Hoyland||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/1/2009|
|You have had me humming the tune of your title all the time I was reading.I am enjoying this story as I love the way your are fleshing out a mysterious character in Tolkien's work.|
THe thought of wearing that tight dress made me shudder!
Author Reply: I've always loved that song from "The King and I." Glad you like it, too.
And again it's fun to add to the backstory for Hurin, and to see how it was he came to marry his Lynesse!
|Virtuella||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/1/2009|
|Maybe it's just me, who is seeing Austen references everywhere, but the ball scene would not appear alien in one of Jane's novels! The characters come to life very swiftly and I almost felt the poor girl's pain in that dreadful dress!|
Author Reply: Obviously you appreciate Austen. Sunny sees Georgette Heyer in this! Heh! I must say I've read Austen more recently than Heyer's works, but I had one roommate in college who loved such stories, so I read my share of her books while she was reading my fantasy and science fiction collection--although she never did appreciate my collection of Lloyd C. Douglas. Heh!
And I think we all empathise with Lynesse's plight.
|Agape4Gondor||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/1/2009|
|Delightful beginning. I was a little nonplussed with Hurin's impairment, for the man is in the thick of the Battle of the Pelennor and I wondered how that could be if he only had one arm, but the way he acts and the way you describe him, makes it all very plausible. A greater man than I had given him credit for. And a very likable and gallant man. I truly like what you've done with him and have my fingers crossed for a happy future for the Warden of the Keys.|
I loved the part with the dress, with Elphir's scorn of the gossip, and with Denethor's 'triumphant' arrival - I found that quite intersting - and appropriate. The little niggling fact that Faramir was not much honored when he entered the room as noted by Hurin was nicely written. Not too coying.
Great chapter. Will look for more!
Author Reply: My version of Hurin of the Keys appears first in "The Keys to the Realm" and then in a short story in the "'Neath Anor, Ithil, and Gil" collection in "Ways Round, Ways Through." He was taught how to fight one-handed by a certain Lord Captain of Gondor's hosts, you see....
Am so glad you approve of him. And I do think that when the Lord Steward enters the ballroom he would be given the honors due him as ruler of the land.
And finally I've responded to the comments and have finished the necessary editing to fit more properly with the Tale of Years and the appropriate ages of Imrahil's children.
Thanks so for the comments--hope it continues to please.
|Sally.Maria||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/1/2009|
|Thank you very much - that was a very interesting beginning. I look forward to finding out more about Gondor at this time. :-)|
Author Reply: Thank you for your patience in waiting for the second chapter, which is now finally posted! It's always a joy to write about Gondor--and the Shire--and Eriador in general--and my idea of Harad as a proto-Egypt....
Thanks so much for your feedback, Sally.Maria.
|Tigger||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/31/2008|
|I was trying and trying and trying to remember where the name Lynessë had come up in any of your stories. Then Faramir saw Hurin looking at himself in the mirror in that hallway and it came to me!!|
And I'd just re read your story about him wanting to give Aragorn a proper Coronation gift sometime last week too. Talk about good timing, huh?
I am very much hooked w/this and looking forward to seeing where you head w/it as well. Why do I have this awful feeling in the pit of my tummy that "Lord" whom they all wished had never come will thinking up some sort of revenge for, to him, Hurin stealing the attentions of Lynesse at the Ball? However, I also have a feeling that very well may change her Mother's mind concerning Hurin and just how suitable a husband he truly is?
They do end up getting married after all, so... :oD
Very much looking forward to seeing where this bunny takes you mellon nin.
Happy New Year!! ((((HGUS))))
Author Reply: Am so glad this one began posting at a good time for you, then, Tigger. And I so love hearing from you!
I'd originally intended this to be part of a story in which various folk begin explaining to Frodo and Lynesse and Hurin's daughters about times when they were younger when their parents were upset with them. Instead, that single story sort of fizzled, and the two episodes I'd envisioned so far ended up being told in "New-Fangled Contraptions" and this tale.
And may 2009 end up being a joyful one for you and yours!
|harrowcat||Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 12/31/2008|
|Time will tell indeed but not to long a time until we find out I hope!|
Author Reply: Indeed, Harrowcat! I had a bit of editing to do with the original chapter, and now have that finished and the next one posted, so will let the next chapters unfold in as a timely manner as I can arrange! Heh!
Haven't been on LJ for several days, so hope your parents are recovering well. The last week has been rather overwhelming, I've found.